Which one can make friendship stronger?
• Having a good time with your friend (Enjoy good time)
• Solving your problem with him or her (talk about problem)
• Supporting each other
Friendship is a heated topic all the time, leading to a wide range of discussions all over the world. There is one statement particularly interest me: The most effective way to build a stronger friendship is to spend as much good time together as possible. However, I hold a different view that talking about problems and having one’s back is of greater importance in terms of a solid friendship for the following reasons.
First and foremost, venting one’s emotions and problems can facilitate friend’s knowing of each other since they communicate by heart. As is known to all, a friendship is especially strengthened when people open their heart. That is, to talk about the problem they are confronting, which enables them to reach the softest part of the other without any barricade. For instance, my roommate who was always an optimistic girl with a big smile on her face one day teared alone under a tree. I said I had her back and she told me she was just frustrated by her math grades. I wiped her tears then shared my method in learning math. Even though that method did not help her, she was grateful for me and I felt our friendship strengthened after that conversation about her problem.
Another point worth mentioning is that mutual trust is a deciding factor to solidify a friendship, which can be cultivated by talking about problem as well as supporting. To state it more clearly, mutual trust is the foundation of not only a strong friendship, but also a solid relationship in any form. Where there is deep friendship, there is real trust between them. It is not hard to imagine how disappointed you will be if your friend tells you nothing about her problem, such as her having financial difficulty as her parents lost their jobs and she did not have the courage to tell her teacher. Nevertheless, provided that she tells you that, you can support her by encouraging her to tell the truth since she can get financial support from local government, through which your friendship can be deepened as well.
Admittedly, having good time together can leave beautiful memory since people tend to clearly remember something happy. Nonetheless, as the famous proverb put it, “A friend in need is a friend indeed,” mutual understanding and supporting raised from problem-sharing is the essence of every long-lasting friendship. Therefore, one is well-advised to talk about his problems with his friends, since it makes their hearts closer.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, nevertheless, nonetheless, so, then, therefore, well, for instance, such as, talking about, as well as, to tell the truth
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 55.0 43.0788530466 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2054.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 416.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.9375 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51620172871 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83867260003 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 237.0 212.727598566 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.569711538462 0.524837075471 109% => OK
syllable_count: 604.8 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.7228366278 48.9658058833 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.111111111 100.406767564 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.1111111111 20.6045352989 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.44444444444 5.45110844103 155% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.426429855007 0.236089414692 181% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.111532647708 0.076458572812 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0581735293769 0.0737576698707 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.240888269043 0.150856017488 160% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.026225443042 0.0645574589148 41% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 11.7677419355 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.67 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.23 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 86.8835125448 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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