Which one do you think is the most important factor for a student to succeed at college or university?
1. Tutors in university.
2. The encouragement from family and friends.
3. High-quality education from high school.
There is no shortage of debate that each student has their own preferred methods and all of them have their own advantages. it is very challenging for students to lead themselves toward success due to the vast factors that play pivotal roles. I strongly believe that one of the most fruitful factors that push students toward success is encouragement from family and friends. I feel this way for two main reasons which will be explored in the following paragraphs.
First of all, one should take into account the fact that when families and friends encourage students, students’ motivation will increase gradually. No one can’t underestimate the role of family and friends when students start to progress. In contrast, most of the students feel depressed because they never inspire from their families. According to a recent survey, most of the students who fail in university exams, and do not have a strong background of education are individuals, that their families never care them, so their adolescents lack any incentive to manage in university. I recently heard the news that reported in the last decades in most parts of South Asia the government enacted the legislation that was about families. it said that most of the families have to encourage their teenagers about education as long as they attend universities. Consequently, most of the students made enormous headway in education, so they attained many achievements in universities.
The second remarkable reason is that, when the family and friends start to encourage students, they feel that their family and friends will champion them in difficult situations. In other words, students will relax and release tension when they know that in the hard condition their families advocate them. As a result, their children strive for each day steadily and improve their knowledge, which requires for university and college, so they have a prosperous time in university. my own experience is a compelling answer, when I was a freshman, I was studying hard to passed my final exams, but I never felt that my family encouraged me to surmounted those hard days. Thus, I thought that my family is not eager enough to support me when I was struggling with my issues. Not only did I lose my inclination, but also I was not such a diligent person like before and failed most of my exams. Had my family encouraged me, I would have felt that they started to adhere me, and succeed in university.
In conclusion, my notion is that one of the most integral factors that lead students toward success is an encouragement that parents do for their children because they have the impetus and start to advance gradually and because they feel that their family supports them when they are in predicaments.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, if, second, so, thus, i feel, in conclusion, in contrast, as a result, first of all, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 29.0 11.0286738351 263% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 75.0 43.0788530466 174% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2314.0 1977.66487455 117% => OK
No of words: 460.0 407.700716846 113% => OK
Chars per words: 5.03043478261 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.6311565067 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80526105791 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 219.0 212.727598566 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.476086956522 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 708.3 618.680645161 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.1130608223 48.9658058833 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.789473684 100.406767564 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.2105263158 20.6045352989 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.89473684211 5.45110844103 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.226058345047 0.236089414692 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0835501224165 0.076458572812 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0609850166685 0.0737576698707 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.157950103971 0.150856017488 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0419606274905 0.0645574589148 65% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.19 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.29 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 86.8835125448 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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