Which one is the most important factor to help you work productively?
Having an environment which is free of noise and distractions
Knowing that you will receive a reward
Doing something you are interested in
Currently, there is an increasing number of individuals suffering from the excessive workload, thus in order to accomplish their work and school assignments before the close deadlines, they attach great importance to elevate their productivity. Meanwhile, owing to the goal of reaping profits, a bunch of conglomerates also put considerable emphasis on the enhancement of efficiency. In order to combat these problems, both workers and entrepreneurs propose disparate opinions. A myriad of individuals reckon that the environment free of noise and distractions is a determinant factor that enables them to work efficiently. While others are convinced that knowing the reward they can receive after finishing tasks stimulates them to devote wholeheartedly toward their works. Personally speaking, I stand on the opposite side and I contend that interest, as the internal stimulus, is the most significant factor in enhancing my productivity and my view can be substantiated as follows.
To start with, as an internal motivator, interest is and has always been playing a pivotal role in improving individuals’ working efficiency. To be more specific, with the interest toward specific domain, individuals upholding this interest can be wholly engrossed in the work, therefore individuals pay no attention to any affairs happening around them. As time goes by, they will not have a sense of frustration or mental exhaustion. Based on the time they save and spontaneous devotion, it is self-explanatory that their working efficiency is elevated to a large extent. A case that can illustrate this point is Thomas Edison. Edison, as one of the most eminent and distinguishing scientists, was fond of science. With the zeal for science, he worked hours continuously to wrought glamorous inventions which are conducive to the urban civilization. Although at that time, the experimental conditions were not satisfying enough, for instance, there were numerous noises since the laboratory was located near factories, Edison still devoted himself toward the scientific invention without procrastination. This example illuminates that interest, which is doomed as internal momentum, plays a determinant role in elevating working efficiency.
What’s more, with regard to other factors that people contend that they contribute to the improvement of working productivity, both the reward and environment fail to elevate the working productivity successfully. For one thing, as for the environment free of noise and distractions, it is widely acknowledged that, nowadays, living in a society full of diversified glamorous technological devices, it is not the noise, but other electronic devices that become the top-rated time killer, like social media appliances, online videos, mobile phone notification. Thus, even working in an environment free of noise, people can still get distracted owing to the diversified affairs that can engage workers’ interests. With regard to the reward can be received after the accomplishment of tasks, some individuals, after weighing the pros of getting rewards and cons of devotion, are inclined to not to get the reward so as to alleviate the tasks they ought to undertake. Worse still, some greedy workers even fabricate their working yield so as to attain the rewards, which obviously exert a detrimental effect on enterprises’ profits. Consequently, knowing a reward we can receive also fails to elevate working efficiency.
In a nutshell, from what has been mentioned above, since distractions cannot be eradicated from any environment and regarding a reward as a motivator are likely to fail for the sake of workers’ own evaluation of the reward’s value, both of them are not the dominant factor in elevating working productivity. Compared to those two parameters listed above, interest, as the internal stimulus, which cannot be altered and is embedded in the workers’ mindset, is the most significant factor that triumphs other factors.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, if, regarding, so, still, therefore, thus, while, as for, as to, for instance, for one thing, to start with, with regard to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 29.0 15.1003584229 192% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 86.0 52.1666666667 165% => OK
Nominalization: 22.0 8.0752688172 272% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3395.0 1977.66487455 172% => OK
No of words: 608.0 407.700716846 149% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.58388157895 4.8611393121 115% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.9656475924 4.48103885553 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.28790381948 2.67179642975 123% => OK
Unique words: 316.0 212.727598566 149% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.519736842105 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 1074.6 618.680645161 174% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.51630824373 119% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 10.0 3.51792114695 284% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 13.0 4.94265232975 263% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 74.0463759039 48.9658058833 151% => OK
Chars per sentence: 147.608695652 100.406767564 147% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.4347826087 20.6045352989 128% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.4347826087 5.45110844103 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 11.8709677419 160% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.191378669614 0.236089414692 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0572451741407 0.076458572812 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0377329403205 0.0737576698707 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.119109523615 0.150856017488 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0165866826318 0.0645574589148 26% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.1 11.7677419355 154% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 28.17 58.1214874552 48% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 10.1575268817 156% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.38 10.9000537634 141% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.65 8.01818996416 120% => OK
difficult_words: 182.0 86.8835125448 209% => Less difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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