Why do you think some people are attracted to dangerous sports or other dangerous activities? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
At the turn of the new century, with the development of human’s modern society, more and more people tend to explore new things, take risks and be different from others in their life. One of the most significant ways to take risks is doing dangerous sports or activities. Actually, People’s attitudes toward reasons of doing hazardous activities are widely varied from person to person. In my vantage point, people try to do risky activities due to enhancing their personal lives and earning a great horde of money.
First and foremost, what provokes people to engage in perilous activities is dramatic positive influence they provide in their life. Human’s life is analogous with a tortuous way in a mountain in quite a few aspects. Doing dangerous activities helps people to take a break from hectic life and unwind by concentrating on what they do. Consider a disappointed person who runs into a huge problem in his life and has no motivation to cope the problems. Not only can these activities make them more energetic, but also they may forget their life failures. Moreover, some despondent people, who lose out in their job or who have love failures, may have another opportunity to prove their abilities while taking part in dangerous sports competitions and feel pleased with themselves. According to recent research conducted in my country, psychologists are in the conviction that excitement of these activities instills valuable concepts such as determination, being ambitious and being hopeful in the ups and downs of life. That is to say, the sense of accomplishment which is gained from doing dangerous activities can raise their self-esteem.
Another subtle point is that they can accumulate a lot of money by doing weird and high risky activities. One of the rigors of living in the modern hectic life is choosing a career which gives the person efficient salary to lead a satisfactory life in future. It is crystal-clear that a person who chooses a risky job is being paid much more salary since they need specific skills and proficiency. As an example, I have a close friend who graduated from one of the most prestigious universities in my country. Although he had several opportunities to work in big companies related to his field, he opted for a risky job in Amusement Park owing to tempting salary. As a result, his best choice revolutionized his life and not only does he support his family financially but also he can experience an independent life by buying a house for himself. (420 words)
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Discourse Markers used:
['actually', 'also', 'but', 'first', 'if', 'may', 'moreover', 'so', 'still', 'while', 'such as', 'as a result', 'that is to say']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.223880597015 0.229887763892 97% => OK
Verbs: 0.159914712154 0.158761421928 101% => OK
Adjectives: 0.123667377399 0.0866891130778 143% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0362473347548 0.046263068375 78% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0618336886994 0.0685040099705 90% => OK
Prepositions: 0.117270788913 0.118717715034 99% => OK
Participles: 0.0490405117271 0.0351676179071 139% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.93094825399 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0319829424307 0.0309702414327 103% => OK
Particles: 0.00213219616205 0.00188951952338 113% => OK
Determiners: 0.0788912579957 0.0887237588012 89% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0127931769723 0.0209618222197 61% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0191897654584 0.0139019557991 138% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2531.0 2387.08602151 106% => OK
No of words: 423.0 408.028673835 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.98345153664 5.86048508987 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53508145475 4.48200974243 101% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.340425531915 0.338922669872 100% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.250591016548 0.251872472559 99% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.203309692671 0.174417080927 117% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.148936170213 0.112833075102 132% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93094825399 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 232.0 212.727598566 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.548463356974 0.524397521467 105% => OK
Word variations: 63.8627376005 59.2087087015 108% => OK
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6684587814 92% => OK
Sentence length: 22.2631578947 20.5533526081 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.3757075519 48.84282405 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 133.210526316 120.699889404 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2631578947 20.5533526081 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.684210526316 0.644075263715 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.5376344086 66% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.54480286738 18% => OK
Readability: 47.3222595496 45.7405998639 103% => OK
Elegance: 1.51239669421 1.45489161554 104% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.221378644385 0.300154397459 74% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0967447753803 0.103427244359 94% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0663187215946 0.0752933317313 88% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.429777466775 0.497263757937 86% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.128537189476 0.151897553556 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0876004252708 0.114077575197 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0685088515023 0.0781384742642 88% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.45001027768 0.336927656856 134% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0142566361543 0.067059652881 21% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.177440360672 0.210909579961 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.065275233321 0.0618886996521 105% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8870967742 59% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.86379928315 207% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.91756272401 81% => OK
Positive topic words: 7.0 8.42114695341 83% => OK
Negative topic words: 8.0 2.4623655914 325% => OK
Neutral topic words: 3.0 2.75985663082 109% => OK
Total topic words: 18.0 13.6433691756 132% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 86.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.0 Out of 30
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