working in a group or working a lone.
without a doubt, people are living longer these days than ever before. While there are many explanations for this phenomenon, I believe that the two most important are advances in science and the fact that people today enjoy manageable working lives. I will explore why I feel this way in the following essay.
First of all, developments in science and technology have done a lot to extend our natural lives. Newly discovered pharmaceuticals and medical devices assist doctors in a wide range of ways. they help in the prevention of illness, in the diagnosis of disease, during treatment and even in the provision of follow-up care. For example, several years ago I was diagnosed with skin cancer. Fortunately, my cancer was discovered at a very early stage of the disease and my treatment was provided very quickly and without any unexpected side-effects. my diagnosis was completed very quickly in a modern lab at a high-tech hospital near my home. As a result of this, I made a rapid and complete recovery. In contrast, several decades ago my grandfather passed away as a result of prostate cancer. he was eventually diagnosed with cancer, but it did not occur quickly enough to save his life. this was because there was simply no technology available to make the diagnosis. Last month, however, I read that because of recent scientific advances his form of cancer now has a ninety-percent survival rate.
Secondly, people today have much more manageable working lives than people in the past experienced. Workers today enjoy both long vacation periods every year and fewer hours at work each day so they have much less stress which can damage their health. I, for example, work just thirty-five hours each week and am given five weeks of time off each year by my employer. my example is not an outlier, as most of my friends and colleagues have a similar benefit package as I do. these perks help me to live a stress-free life and maintain a healthy body. my uncle, who is much older than I, worked more than forty-five hours each week during his career. Moreover, he enjoyed just a one week holiday each winter. His work was physically demanding and he developed a lot of health problems as he aged. The toll his work took on his body was a major cause of his early death, in my opinion. The comparison of myself and my uncle demonstrate how today’s working lives contribute to longer life spans.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that there are two main reasons why people today live longer than earlier generations. Those reasons are advances in science and technology, and gentler working conditions.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, while, for example, i feel, in conclusion, in contrast, as a result, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2179.0 1977.66487455 110% => OK
No of words: 447.0 407.700716846 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.87472035794 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.59808378696 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71833530423 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 248.0 212.727598566 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5548098434 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 693.9 618.680645161 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 30.4924086003 48.9658058833 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.8076923077 100.406767564 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.1923076923 20.6045352989 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.88461538462 5.45110844103 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 14.0 5.5376344086 253% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.1504014199 0.236089414692 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0439277021063 0.076458572812 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0620151392212 0.0737576698707 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.095702568435 0.150856017488 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0711627168165 0.0645574589148 110% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.1 11.7677419355 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.67 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.05 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 86.8835125448 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.5 Out of 30
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