You have enough money to purchase either a house or a business. Which would you choose to buy? Give specific reasons to explain your choice.
It is commonly held belief that in most of the cases, people have a plan to buy a house or start to do a business when they have a considerable amount of money in the world today. It is often suggested to be a house owner instead of being a tenant, however, some of the people like to stay as a lodger and start to do a business if this money is tempting for them. In the present essay, an attempt is made to discuss that the advantage of being apartment owner emulate its disadvantage with at least two basic reasons.
First of all, having a private house will give you tranquility. To start with, close to the end of the month, people are often stressful when they have to pay for their lodgments. For instance, according to current research published by the University of Manchester, in more than 70 percent of the cases, people don't feel safe as a reason of fear of inability to pay rent. In addition, people are always worried about finding a new place with reasonable price if their house owner asks them for eviction. For example, as an experience in my life, I obliged to stay in university accomodation, when my apartment owner didn't accept to extend my contract for more time.
Secondly, with saving this amount of money which normally must pay as rent each month you will be able to start a small business and extend it in a long period of time. For one thing, there are lots of small internets based business currently, which doesn't need a huge amount of money. to compound the puzzle, invest in the stock exchange is also possible in a while. All in all, you will reach two goals in a period of time which means having your own house and your business besides.
In view of the above remarks, it can conclude that purchasing a house will be more valuable than start a business as the general point of view. However, the question is that with these clear reasons why some of the people still do a risk and start a business instead of buying a house. If you ask this question from different people, probably you will get different answers.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'suggested being'.
Suggestion: suggested being
...f money in the world today. It is often suggested to be a house owner instead of being a tenant...
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Suggestion: some
...ner instead of being a tenant, however, some of the people like to stay as a lodger and sta...
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Suggestion: don't
...re than 70 percent of the cases, people dont feel safe as a reason of fear of inabil...
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Suggestion: didn't
...y accomodation, when my apartment owner didnt accept to extend my contract for more t...
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Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
... small business and extend it in a long period of time. For one thing, there are lots of small...
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Suggestion: doesn't
...ternets based business currently, which doesnt need a huge amount of money. to compoun...
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Suggestion: To
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Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...l in all, you will reach two goals in a period of time which means having your own house and y...
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Message: Simply use 'some'.
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...on is that with these clear reasons why some of the people still do a risk and start a busi...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, still, while, at least, for example, for instance, in addition, first of all, for one thing, to start with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 43.0788530466 70% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1682.0 1977.66487455 85% => OK
No of words: 377.0 407.700716846 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.46153846154 4.8611393121 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4064143971 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.43013096759 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 212.727598566 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.503978779841 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 529.2 618.680645161 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 37.5781260251 48.9658058833 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.133333333 100.406767564 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.1333333333 20.6045352989 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.8666666667 5.45110844103 199% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.19864036048 0.236089414692 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0738257455462 0.076458572812 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0678669137779 0.0737576698707 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.123829984635 0.150856017488 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.033908955429 0.0645574589148 53% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 11.7677419355 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 63.02 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.88 10.9000537634 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.56 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 86.8835125448 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 17.5 10.002688172 175% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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