young people enjoy life more than the older people
The entertainments have an influential and tremendous impact on our lives. In fact, it is vitally important people enjoy their times regardless their ages because this will help them to get rid of the stress and built up the tension of their stressful days. However, the new technology in which the kids are fascinating and fond with, it provides myriad opportunities for joyful to children than the old age people such as the smartphones and the internet. Therefore, I believe that the young generation enjoying their time in a wide range than the old ones because of the new innovations and the healthier bodies. The following explanations go as follows.
First, children enjoying a verity of social relationships more than parents due to the advancement and the leap of the technological innovations that help them to interact and communicate easily. Indeed, there are many social media and applications that they can use by utilizing the internet and their modern devices which will help them to create new friendships. For example, I met many friends from diverse spheres by communicating with them through the skype and then after time I saw them face to face by visiting them in their countries, so, this what broadened my horizon because I learned how to deal effectively with people from different areas and how to collaborate effectively. Hence, such a collaborative environment enhanced my social skills immensely which had a positive impact on my future workflow and productivity. In contrast, most of the former generation are unable to imply these gadgets and use the internet as the younger ones, as a result, they could not enjoy the social atmosphere. Consequently, kids have a chance to get fun more than the old people.
Second, the youth people for sure have healthy body structure and good muscle tone that assist them to practice sports more than the older ones. In fact, performing sports mean they will be strong as they will have a more athletes body which will help them to enjoy their time. For instance, I used to play some forms of sport's games on regular basis because of its benefits on both my well-being alongside my welfare. Moreover, these exercises endow me with a healthy body that has the ability to withstand many diseases and be far from the leading causes to obesity as they will aid me to quell away of the pack on pounds. On the other hand, the old people always have difficulty to practice sport, besides, they have many medicines they have to hold them all the time with them, moreover, most of them have diseases such as arthritis that restrict them from walking and running because they may lead to much adverse effect on their bodies. In conclusion, the children have the chance of entertainment more than the older ones because of their hemostasis.
TO sum up, the young people have more fun and are able to spend their time in pleasure things than the seniors because they can build the solid base of the communications skills by employing the new technology more than the old ones and have better health.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, consequently, first, hence, however, if, may, moreover, second, so, then, therefore, well, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in contrast, in fact, such as, as a result, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 57.0 43.0788530466 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 67.0 52.1666666667 128% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2543.0 1977.66487455 129% => OK
No of words: 522.0 407.700716846 128% => OK
Chars per words: 4.87164750958 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.77988695657 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68351147453 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 251.0 212.727598566 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.480842911877 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 792.0 618.680645161 128% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 29.0 20.1344086022 144% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 74.0128659152 48.9658058833 151% => OK
Chars per sentence: 141.277777778 100.406767564 141% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.0 20.6045352989 141% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.8888888889 5.45110844103 218% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.222074068367 0.236089414692 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0786215622835 0.076458572812 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0765443923624 0.0737576698707 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.167759166283 0.150856017488 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0465400588974 0.0645574589148 72% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 11.7677419355 136% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.5 58.1214874552 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.56 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.64 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 118.0 86.8835125448 136% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.0537634409 135% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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