Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life.
Events have an influential and tremendous impact on our lives. In fact, it is vitally important to follow them and stay updated with them in order for the best results to follow suit. Moreover, there are many types of events such as for scientific reasons or for entertainment and people will choose to attend the one that suits their desire. Therefore, I believe that the dwellers from everywhere must know about the events not only in their countries but in the whole world due to its benefits in improving the social skills and enhance the educational level. In the following paragraphs, I will explain my opinion clearly.
To begin with, successful people are those who own a concrete basis of social skills because they are deemed as a lighting guide to fulfill their goals. Indeed, by attending an event in cities away from the place they live in, this will assist them to refine their social skills. For instance, my father always surged me to attend all the events that will involve a huge number of people because he was a socialized person, so, from his personal experience and knowledge he knew the merits of creating new friendships. Thus, Three years ago, I went to Paris to attend an art conference, I engaged in a conversation with myriad people and this reflects positively on mu future personality because I learn how to cooperate efficiently and collaborate effectively and such a collaborative environment enhanced my communication skills immensely which, in turn, this had a great influence on my future work productivity. In conclusion, in order to create a strong bond for our large social network, people should eagerly seek to attend as many conferences as possible to sharpen these skills.
Second, it is vital to instill a profound base of learning from an early age because this will help to guide our nation to progress. In fact, encouraging the young generation to register for scientific events will aid them to improve their intellectual abilities and broaden their horizon. For example, I am fascinated in studying astronomy and fond in watching all movies about it. Thus, last summer vacation, there was an event related to this field happened in the united states, I applied for a visa and I got, this opportunity gave me a chance to improve my information and widen my perspective because there were many famous professors who were highly knowledgeable that helped me by answering many puzzling questions I had in my mind. Therefore, being involved in such these activities will help people to carve out knowledge that will have a great impact on their studying career.
To sum up, it is crucial to encourage our children to engage in events about divers fields because this will help them to improve their communication skills and their educational capabilities.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, moreover, second, so, still, therefore, thus, well, as for, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in fact, such as, in my opinion, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 62.0 43.0788530466 144% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 68.0 52.1666666667 130% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2338.0 1977.66487455 118% => OK
No of words: 470.0 407.700716846 115% => OK
Chars per words: 4.97446808511 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65612321451 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79314299749 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 250.0 212.727598566 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.531914893617 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 738.9 618.680645161 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 20.1344086022 144% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 90.1127765636 48.9658058833 184% => OK
Chars per sentence: 146.125 100.406767564 146% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.375 20.6045352989 143% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.5 5.45110844103 193% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.12964307529 0.236089414692 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0520104493256 0.076458572812 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.029919112967 0.0737576698707 41% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0927459962433 0.150856017488 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0443741739541 0.0645574589148 69% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.7 11.7677419355 142% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.04 58.1214874552 72% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 10.1575268817 144% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.14 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.17 8.01818996416 114% => OK
difficult_words: 122.0 86.8835125448 140% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.0537634409 135% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.5 Out of 30
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