Young people nowadays do not give enough time to helping their communities.
It is hard to deny that in today’s progressive and complicate life, young people have a determining effect on the future of any community. However, due to the modernization and evolving of technology in an extreme manner, there has been a controversial debate among socialists above the notion of whether young people today do not devote enough time to helping their sociologists or they are concerned about their communities. I concur with the latter assumption, concerning that youngsters today are willing to assist to their society. My viewpoint is based on a few reasons, two compelling ones of which are elaborated upon hereunder.
The first vital point to bear in mind is that nowadays a considerable development is made on the mind of young people thanks to technology which made youngster be more open-minded and responsible for their societies. It is no secret to anyone that the genesis of technology and social media play a vital role in current culture and social matters since a large amount of information are exchanged through these ways which can help people to become informed and more knowledgeable about what happens around them. For instance, when a problem occurs in the community, people can be aware of it through the use of social networking on the internet like Instagram, and try to criticize or to make ideas in order to address the problem. In this vein, young people are nourished by this information and events when they see what adults do toward helping their communities, which can provide for them an opportunity in order to become an informed and knowledgeable person for their communities in near future. Had there never been technology today like social media, youngsters would have had no concern and obsession for their communities.
Furthermore, young people like to be an essential component of their society which can help enhance their sense of responsibility to the society, which means that the more a person consider him responsible to a community, the more time and effort he will dedicate to make their society flourish and prosper. For example, if a youngster thinks that he or she is responsible to the level of science and knowledge of his or her society, he or she will give more time and effort to learning and studying in order to become an influential and learned person for his community. Moreover, when young people are told that they are responsible for environment as the members of the society, they get all their endeavour towards taking care of their surroundings such as parks, cities, seas and so forth.
To put all in a nutshell, having considered all the aforementioned reasons and examples, I firmly do hold that today young people are concerned about their societies. Not only does the advent of technology has made today’s young people more open-minded towards their communities, but a sense of being important for society has also made them more responsible and has motivated them to devote more time and efforts to make their society better.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 201, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in an extreme manner" with adverb for "extreme"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...odernization and evolving of technology in an extreme manner, there has been a controversial debate ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, moreover, so, for example, for instance, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 26.0 13.8261648746 188% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 73.0 52.1666666667 140% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2525.0 1977.66487455 128% => OK
No of words: 503.0 407.700716846 123% => OK
Chars per words: 5.01988071571 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.73578520332 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8619559102 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 232.0 212.727598566 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.461232604374 0.524837075471 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 801.9 618.680645161 130% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 35.0 20.1344086022 174% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 70.2997953375 48.9658058833 144% => OK
Chars per sentence: 180.357142857 100.406767564 180% => OK
Words per sentence: 35.9285714286 20.6045352989 174% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.57142857143 5.45110844103 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.330208436534 0.236089414692 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.112747540574 0.076458572812 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0800427580718 0.0737576698707 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.208073395475 0.150856017488 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0248115136219 0.0645574589148 38% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 20.2 11.7677419355 172% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.95 58.1214874552 62% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.9 10.1575268817 166% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.43 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.89 8.01818996416 111% => OK
difficult_words: 112.0 86.8835125448 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 16.0 10.0537634409 159% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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