In your country, is there more need for land to be left in its natural condition or is there more need for land to be developed for housing and industry? Use specific reasons and examples to support to support your answer.
In recent times, there has been a widespread debate on whether people in my hometown Saudi Arabia need more land for housing and industry or not. Personally, I think the shortage in both industrial and housing building is tremendous, so my country needs a lot of lands in order to develop them.
To begin with, Saudi Arabia has a huge shortage in the housing because the abrupt increase in the population number in last ten years. As everyone knows, my hometown Makkah is considered to be the only holy place for Muslims nation. Millions of people visit Saudi Arabia every month. Most of them avoid leaving the country after they finish their prayers at the holy mosque. Therefore, they stay in Makkah and increase the demand for housing in most of the city. For example, last years the government built more than hundred towers in Makkah to overcome this problem. In addition, the government asks more people to leave their houses because they need more land to build more towers to accommodate several families. Indeed, today, the demand for housing is increasing in Saudi Arabi with the increase number of population and pilgrims.
Adding to the previous point, my hometown needs a great development in industrial building. Nowadays, there is only few oil industrial buildings that help the government to export the oil and get some money. Otherwise, people in my hometown get everything from outside sources. They get their plastic from China and they get their electronic device from Japan. Furthermore, there is no local made clothes companies in Saudi Arabia; people used to get their clothes from India. Obviously, Saudi Arabi needs to open and build many industrial buildings that will help the country to flourish and get some money.
In conclusion, I encourage the government in my country to develop more housing and industrial building to overcome the shortage in both sections.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Use simply: 'a hundred'.
Suggestion: a hundred
...st years the government built more than hundred towers in Makkah to overcome this probl...
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Message: Possible agreement error. The noun oil seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'little oil'.
Suggestion: little oil
...trial building. Nowadays, there is only few oil industrial buildings that help the gove...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, so, therefore, for example, i think, in addition, in conclusion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 11.0286738351 18% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 43.0788530466 53% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1582.0 1977.66487455 80% => OK
No of words: 315.0 407.700716846 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.02222222222 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21286593061 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54046416544 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 153.0 212.727598566 72% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.485714285714 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 490.5 618.680645161 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 28.8053964571 48.9658058833 59% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 93.0588235294 100.406767564 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5294117647 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.35294117647 5.45110844103 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.229053454097 0.236089414692 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.078896982439 0.076458572812 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0720061086035 0.0737576698707 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.157680841028 0.150856017488 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0787758333098 0.0645574589148 122% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 11.7677419355 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.79 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 86.8835125448 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 63.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 19.0 Out of 30
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