In your country, is there more need for land to be left in its natural condition or is there more need for land to be developed for housing and industry? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
I think in my country there is more need of a land in its natural condition. There are different reasons I think in this way, which I explain further.
Countries are developing day by day, urbanization, industrialization are the important factor we are consider as a development. But in today’s world we are losing something important with this development, and that important thing is nature. We are ignoring the consequences, but nature answering us through the climate changes. Cutting the trees, pollution are the main causes of this. People cutting a tree for different purpose, sometimes they cut them because they want to build a huge building or industry on that land. And the results of all this one day we left only with building and industries. No more, land to tree plantation or to play. Moreover, I think population is also the cause of this. Increasing in a population also increasing in the accommodation. For this we need more land to build houses or apartments.
India is my country, and we know that India is a second country in population. Also, it is a developing country. In the process of development, for urbanization people cuttings tree and making a building on that place. Also, they use the land to make a dam to store a water. Using a land for building a tower and highways. Eventually, there are no more land left, in its natural condition. I want to share an event from last year, In Mumbai there is a “Array Forest”, government people take the half land and cut the tree from there to make a road. And the same thing happened with different states. If we are keep doing like this, we left with no land for playing, for trees. This is the time; we start to focusing on these issues.
Therefore, because all these reasons which I explain above, my country need more land in its natural condition.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'considered'.
Suggestion: considered
...ization are the important factor we are consider as a development. But in today’s world ...
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Line 3, column 266, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[1]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'water'.
Suggestion: water
...hey use the land to make a dam to store a water. Using a land for building a tower and ...
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Line 6, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... more land in its natural condition.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, moreover, second, so, therefore, i think
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 52.1666666667 73% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1520.0 1977.66487455 77% => OK
No of words: 322.0 407.700716846 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.72049689441 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23607819155 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83374159578 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 151.0 212.727598566 71% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.468944099379 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 472.5 618.680645161 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.2690133867 48.9658058833 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 66.0869565217 100.406767564 66% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.0 20.6045352989 68% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.39130434783 5.45110844103 44% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 14.0 4.88709677419 286% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.306973692099 0.236089414692 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0993694946125 0.076458572812 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.107372114999 0.0737576698707 146% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.221043026176 0.150856017488 147% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.024266638346 0.0645574589148 38% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.8 11.7677419355 66% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.73 58.1214874552 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.5 10.9000537634 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.22 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 86.8835125448 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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