Your friend has the opportunity to study in either one of two majors (fields of study). Which one of the
following two types of majors do you think is a better choice and why?
- A major that would allow your friend to complete his or her studies and get a degree faster (so that
your friend can start working full-time soon).
- A major that would require more years of study but is likely to lead to more and better employment
opportunities and job offers in the future.
We are living in an age in which education plays a crucial role in the development of people in a broad sense and in their job particularly. In this regard, there is a long-standing discussion among individuals about whether a major which requires more years of study is more beneficial than a major which needs fewer years to be graduated. Some people may hold the view that completing studies and getting a degree faster would be more suitable, while, some others may take an opposite viewpoint. I strongly contend that choosing a major that requires more years of study will assist students to take a more prestigious job and would be more beneficial for students. In the following, I will elaborate upon my standpoint through two reasonable pieces of evidence.
The First exquisite point to be mentioned is that it is generally agreed that people’s knowledge and skills play a significant role in finding their ideal job. The more someone is knowledgeable, the more he or she would be successful to find a high-ranked carrier and climb the carrier ladder more effectively. Additionally, Needless to say, that people who spend more years to study at university are more respected and honored which opens doors for fostering their job positions. Take a personal experience as an example. I studied in Tehran University for more than 6 years for getting a master license in GIS engineering field. It took long years to master all of the details which are essential information that one actually need during his or her career. Meanwhile, on the other hand, my brother took a 2 years course in the rudimentary and introductory materials of my major. Although he had the chance to start his own business at the same time that I launched, I could take full advantages of my knowledge to promote my business in an excellent fashion that helped me make money than him.
Another reason which deserves some words here is that people who spend more years on their studies at a university could not only extend their networks of friends but also take full advantages of their relations. It is generally agreed that those who study more than other people have the chance to live more time in dorm rooms with their close friends and classmates. Furthermore, living in dorm rooms especially living away has lots of advantages along the joyful moments that students experience with each other's company. According to a recent study that has been published in Time magazine, students who devote more time for graduating from master positions have stronger relationships with their intimate friends thanks to the fact that they live a long time with each other. However, students who are recruited by companies after taking a short time course seems to be more anxious and nervous since they bear more nervous hours during their youngsters and have not had the opportunity to develop and strength their ties of relationships.
In brief, one can logically draw the conclusion that spending more hours at a university by choosing majors which takes more time can benefit him in terms of enhancing his knowledge and improving his relations. However, there are other reasons and examples which challenge these ideas, not mentioned above. It is highly recommended that a survey can assess the profound results of this decision on students’ morale and performance.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 667, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...ing field. It took long years to master all of the details which are essential information...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 1044, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in an excellent fashion" with adverb for "excellent"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
... of my knowledge to promote my business in an excellent fashion that helped me make money than him. ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 510, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'others'' or 'other's'?
Suggestion: others'; other's
...ents that students experience with each others company. According to a recent study th...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, may, so, while, in brief, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 29.0 11.0286738351 263% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 58.0 43.0788530466 135% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 69.0 52.1666666667 132% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2800.0 1977.66487455 142% => OK
No of words: 560.0 407.700716846 137% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.0 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.8645985582 4.48103885553 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78574862616 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 272.0 212.727598566 128% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.485714285714 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 875.7 618.680645161 142% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 52.9101835977 48.9658058833 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 133.333333333 100.406767564 133% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.6666666667 20.6045352989 129% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.61904761905 5.45110844103 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.164774149238 0.236089414692 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0535618736798 0.076458572812 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0452739160736 0.0737576698707 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.110654976131 0.150856017488 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0377759834837 0.0645574589148 59% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 11.7677419355 132% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 58.1214874552 78% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.02 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.68 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 133.0 86.8835125448 153% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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