Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Educating children is a more difficult task today than it was in the past because they spend so much time on cell phone, online games, and social networking Web site.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer
Since the dawn of civilization, education has been playing a critical role in people's success. Thus, the educational policy developers are considering the pros and cons of various agents in this phenomenon to develop its efficiency. In this regard, there is a long-standing discussion among individuals about the effects of technology-related types of equipment on students' performance. Some people may hold the view that these devices make a positive influence on students' education performance, while some others take an opposite viewpoint. I strongly believe that the advantages of technology for students' education outweigh its' disadvantages. I will elaborate upon my standpoint through three pieces of evidence.
The first exquisite point to be mentioned is that it is generally agreed that smartphones and social networking website pave the way for transferring information. Therefore, these developments give the opportunity to students and pupils to not only grasp a huge bunch of data but also taking full advantages of technology for understanding the beneficial impacts of various scientific knowledge. Take a personal experience as an example. When I studied at Tehran University, I needed to develop my English language skills for dealing with various articles and papers. Needless to say, that memorizing copious English vocab is a boring duty that I required to do. Meanwhile, by utilizing my smartphone and applying a mobile game that helped to learn vocab during the game, I could cope with its difficulties. In addition, It would be no exaggeration to say that learning new vocab not only was an interesting duty of my everyday life but also I never felt disappointed about forgetting newly learned vocab.
Another reason which deserves some words here is that It is generally agreed that social networking websites and applications can open doors for enlarging friends' circle of children which enables them to discuss their studies. Moreover, these applications can assist children to constitute various meetings with their classmates that can positively impact on their performance. According to a recent study that has been published in Education magazine, the advent of social networking websites has paved the way for children to deal with their mathematical problems. As a result, children who used these apps has optimized their scores in mathematical courses while they spend less time and energy on resolving challenging questions.
In brief, one can logically draw the conclusion that technology devices have played a beneficial role in educating children in terms of helping children to access lots of information and learn them in an effective way and enabling children to discuss their educational issues by using social apps. However, there are some reasons and examples, challenging these ideas, not mentioned above. All in all, it is highly recommended that a survey can assess the profound results of these articles on educating children
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 366, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'students'' or 'student's'?
Suggestion: students'; student's
...echnology-related types of equipment on students performance. Some people may hold the v...
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Line 1, column 466, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'students'' or 'student's'?
Suggestion: students'; student's
...se devices make a positive influence on students education performance, while some other...
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Line 8, column 199, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in an effective way" with adverb for "effective"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...cess lots of information and learn them in an effective way and enabling children to discuss their ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, moreover, so, therefore, thus, while, in addition, in brief, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 52.1666666667 121% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.0752688172 198% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2522.0 1977.66487455 128% => OK
No of words: 462.0 407.700716846 113% => OK
Chars per words: 5.45887445887 4.8611393121 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63618218583 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.0780408036 2.67179642975 115% => OK
Unique words: 259.0 212.727598566 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.560606060606 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 799.2 618.680645161 129% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.1206393741 48.9658058833 121% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.1 100.406767564 126% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.1 20.6045352989 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.4 5.45110844103 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.12844055016 0.236089414692 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0369925496778 0.076458572812 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0324200034458 0.0737576698707 44% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0794680330107 0.150856017488 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0400377988677 0.0645574589148 62% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.8 11.7677419355 134% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 58.1214874552 68% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.68 10.9000537634 135% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.7 8.01818996416 121% => OK
difficult_words: 144.0 86.8835125448 166% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 88.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.5 Out of 30
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