Altruism

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Altruism

Altruism is a behavioral characteristic, where one gives up one's necessity for the benefit of other's, commonly observed in humans, including other mammals. An individual performing altruistic act not only gives up the self-benefit for the sake of others but also, in some circumstances risks its life for other's safety. The behavior of meerkat sentinel, the standing guard of the group and human donation of organs are commonly cited examples of altruism. However, not all accept these instances to completely represent altruism.

In the meerkat group, sentinel(the standing guard) produces an alarm cry when it spots a predator, like a hawk. It is believed that the alarm cry warns the other members of the risk, and affords them to escape. As a consequence, the guard exposes itself to the predator and risks its own life for the safety of others. It has to guard the group while others hunt and eat. Moreover, it has to flee alone while others are relatively well protected in the group. This activity of sentinel is often regarded as altruism. However, this concept, due to the lack of sufficient information, often draws the need for re-examination. It is reported that the sentinel eats to a full stomach before it starts its duty as a guard. In addition, the plausibility of its alarm cry to distract the predator away from it to other members of the group can't be rejected. It might provide it with additional safety. Unlike the previous consideration, the later argument questions the altruism in meerkat.

Human donation of organs, like kidney, to the family members or even the strangers is also regarded as an altruistic act: the one who donates renders the prolonged life to the receiver for nothing material in return. However, the non-material achievement of the donor subjects this act as an unreliable example of altruism. The donor is well recognized in society, he/she is lauded with appreciation and approbation. Considering the enhanced self-worth after donation, it can no more be considered altruism.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 832, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, moreover, so, well, while, as to, in addition

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 10.4613686534 105% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 5.04856512141 59% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 7.30242825607 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 12.0772626932 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 22.412803532 107% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 30.3222958057 145% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 5.01324503311 239% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1693.0 1373.03311258 123% => OK
No of words: 333.0 270.72406181 123% => OK
Chars per words: 5.08408408408 5.08290768461 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27180144563 4.04702891845 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92064544398 2.5805825403 113% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 145.348785872 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.534534534535 0.540411800872 99% => OK
syllable_count: 536.4 419.366225166 128% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 3.25607064018 276% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 8.0 8.23620309051 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 2.5761589404 272% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 13.0662251656 145% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 21.2450331126 80% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.4657784353 49.2860985944 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.1052631579 110.228320801 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.5263157895 21.698381199 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.63157894737 7.06452816374 51% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.09492273731 73% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 4.19205298013 24% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 4.33554083885 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 4.45695364238 157% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.27373068433 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.221894390605 0.272083759551 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0835928666608 0.0996497079465 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.112850683211 0.0662205650399 170% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.167918685018 0.162205337803 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0506096288465 0.0443174109184 114% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 13.3589403974 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 53.8541721854 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.0289183223 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.89 12.2367328918 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.13 8.42419426049 108% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 63.6247240618 154% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.7273730684 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.498013245 84% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.2008830022 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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