Do you or disagre withe the folowing staement? Governments should spend more money in support of the arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams.
It goes without saying that from ancient times to this contemporary modern era, emperors and governments have preoccupied with the concern that their societies should provide diverse assortments of entertainments and activities; arts and sports are no exception to this very notion. While many policymakers and practitioners believe that governments should allocate a considerable budget to art skills, others stand at the other side of the continuum, hold the view that the government's financial concern should direct toward athletic activities like Olympic teams. Governments should prioritize art and spend more money to support arts and artistic works as far as I am concerned. The reasons to substantiate my viewpoint are elaborated upon hereunder.
To begin with, it is crystal clear that art is a good indicator of the historical and cultural background of a community. The support of which is a lens through which people can gain knowledge about a country. To be more specific, when a government spends financial allocation to support art, they are indirectly influencing people's long-lasting desire to become diagnostic with the historical and cultural background of society. Undoubtedly, art is a precious treasure that will quench the thirst of enthusiastic people to become aware of society's experiences and revolutions. An example can drive this notion home .in my country's context, various galleries, and exhibitions are being set up by financial support of the government, especially in the metropolitan cities which attract considerable tourists .when tourists and foreigners visit these art galleries, they become familiar with the beauty, uniqueness, and elaborate works of artisans which resembles my county's enriched historical and cultural background. Painting exhibitions of well-known painters are a compelling example that paves the way for different people to appreciate the work's delicateness and learn about past generations' cultural and historical values in some pieces of art. It plays as Unversity of humanitarian and fine art as well,
Moreover, any art and artistic works can be considered a good source of income for many people; thus, governmental financial support can change artists' way of living. In other words, some people and individuals should be called an artist because the handwork they produced is unique. For example, many of these so-called-artists afford their living substance by selling and auctioning their products and items. When the government supports these individuals, they will be positively reinforced to work even more challenging. The result of the society's economic status will improve. Under such circumstances, more and more people will call into work as entrepreneurs in art galleries and enrich themselves. To put it into a vivid picture, Italy - is known for its clothes fashion -started up art workshops to find talented people. Having in these workshops and having a good command of the clothing industry, these people earned their own money and flourished, contributing to the bloom Italian economy.
In conclusion, taking the aforementioned analyses and cases into account, it is an inevitable result that advocating the arts is a more rational policy compared to allotting more major funds the state-athletic teams owing to supporting arts apprise people of their history and cultural prominence, and create an essential source of capital for the country.
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Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 10.4613686534 172% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 5.04856512141 257% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 27.0 7.30242825607 370% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 15.0 12.0772626932 124% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 22.412803532 161% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 66.0 30.3222958057 218% => Less preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 7.0 5.01324503311 140% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2907.0 1373.03311258 212% => Less number of characters wanted.
No of words: 525.0 270.72406181 194% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.53714285714 5.08290768461 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.78673985869 4.04702891845 118% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.09526547537 2.5805825403 120% => OK
Unique words: 284.0 145.348785872 195% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.540952380952 0.540411800872 100% => OK
syllable_count: 897.3 419.366225166 214% => syllable counts are too long.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.55342163355 109% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 3.25607064018 246% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 4.0 8.23620309051 49% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 1.25165562914 320% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.51434878587 198% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 2.5761589404 272% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 13.0662251656 145% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 21.2450331126 127% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 99.5645088008 49.2860985944 202% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 153.0 110.228320801 139% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.6315789474 21.698381199 127% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.21052631579 7.06452816374 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 4.19205298013 167% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 4.33554083885 346% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 4.45695364238 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.27373068433 94% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.257347564274 0.272083759551 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0805125092686 0.0996497079465 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0790220533381 0.0662205650399 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.167907524064 0.162205337803 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0519142403439 0.0443174109184 117% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.5 13.3589403974 138% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.61 53.8541721854 66% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 5.55761589404 202% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 11.0289183223 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.15 12.2367328918 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.82 8.42419426049 117% => OK
difficult_words: 161.0 63.6247240618 253% => Less difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 10.7273730684 177% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.498013245 122% => OK
text_standard: 19.0 11.2008830022 170% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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