If you could change one important thing about your hometown, what would you change?
The hometown in which we live and grow is of paramount importance because it implicitly or explicitly has either beneficial or detrimental effects on people living in it. With this in mind, if I could make a vital change in my hometown. I would improve its city management in general and traffic management as well as building construction management in particular.
Nowadays, most of the large cities in the world are daily plagued with heavy traffic virtually all through the day, and my hometown is no exception. People have to spend their otherwise precious time in traffic. The amount of time wasted in traffic can be beneficial not only for an individual stuck in traffic but also for the whole society. What I mean is that if the individual spends this time in their jobs, they will earn more money, and other people of the city can benefit from his or her performed duties. Also, if the individual spends this time in recreational activities, not only will he or she both happier and more relaxed rather than angry and bellicose, but the tension and violence in the city will decrease significantly as well. Moreover, abundant energy in the form of fuels used in traffic imposes much expenditure, which can be allocated to other crucial goals such as education and healthcare development, on the government. The management of traffic, therefore, has knock-on effects on societies, and to efficiently manage traffic, authorities can apply an extended highway system and state-of-the-art management techniques.
Another problem my hometown is afflicted with is that the buildings are constructed without any order and logic throughout the city. To illustrate my view, I offer several examples of its negative repercussions. The first one is that there are a great number of narrow alleys in neighborhoods whether the rich or the poor inhabit them; however, the city council allows constructors to erect buildings with more floors than standard buildings in such areas must have. This results in overcrowded neighborhoods with a low level of accessibility when a disaster occurs. Another instance is that the city council allows sky-high structures to be erect in the suburbs of the city, which are enormous obstacles in the path of winds towards the city. Hence, the concentration of pollution surges, thereby threatening the citizens’ health. If there is a true determination to resolve this problem, proficient environmental professors and engineers will have to be engaged.
To summarize, by taking into account what I mentioned above, I would ameliorate the city management in my hometown, which is the root of many problems and difficulties, if I was allowed to make an essential change in my hometown. Finally, I do believe that most of these hardships can be eradicated thanks to the galloping rate at which technologies and sciences develop and to efficacious management.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 263, Rule ID: A_GREAT_NUMBER_OF_NN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'narrows'?
Suggestion: narrows
...one is that there are a great number of narrow alleys in neighborhoods whether the ric...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, hence, however, if, moreover, so, therefore, well, i mean, in general, in particular, such as, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 10.4613686534 182% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 5.04856512141 257% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 22.0 7.30242825607 301% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 11.0 12.0772626932 91% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 22.412803532 170% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 66.0 30.3222958057 218% => Less preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 18.0 5.01324503311 359% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2427.0 1373.03311258 177% => OK
No of words: 470.0 270.72406181 174% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.16382978723 5.08290768461 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65612321451 4.04702891845 115% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.0429586101 2.5805825403 118% => OK
Unique words: 258.0 145.348785872 178% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.548936170213 0.540411800872 102% => OK
syllable_count: 765.0 419.366225166 182% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 3.25607064018 184% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.23620309051 73% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 1.25165562914 320% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 1.51434878587 264% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 2.5761589404 194% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 13.0662251656 145% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 21.2450331126 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.6315540507 49.2860985944 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.736842105 110.228320801 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.7368421053 21.698381199 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.94736842105 7.06452816374 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 4.19205298013 24% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 4.33554083885 231% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 4.45695364238 202% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.27373068433 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0914738368508 0.272083759551 34% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0293895658465 0.0996497079465 29% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.054159928527 0.0662205650399 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0749948779542 0.162205337803 46% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0569906650307 0.0443174109184 129% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 13.3589403974 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 53.8541721854 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.0289183223 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.94 12.2367328918 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.16 8.42419426049 109% => OK
difficult_words: 129.0 63.6247240618 203% => Less difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.7273730684 79% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.498013245 110% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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