In some countries, teenagers have jobs while they are still students. Do you think this is a good idea?
The level of education and literacy of any individual in a country plays a key role not only in the progress of his or her life but also in the development of their country specifically in the present-day world in which technologies and sciences are constantly changed and improved at an astounding rate. In some countries, teenagers both work and study simultaneously during their schooldays. However, I am a strong critic of this school of thought.
The first and foremost reason why I disagree with adolescents’ simultaneous working and studying is that they lose their attention and concentration on their courses and lessons. I subscribe to the idea that a student’s essential duties and aims are to perfectly learn their school lessons in order to achieve future accomplishments such as entering a distinguishing university and obtaining a job with a high salary. If students are involved in working, they will possibly lose their focus on their lessons, get lower grades in their lessons than their classmates, and fall behind their peers; then, they are eventually fired from their schools. It may be claimed that students need to learn how to earn money; nevertheless, I believe that they are going to have better opportunities in the future, particularly in the university period, to experience more related as well as specialized work with a high wage. In addition, countries demand specialists who render their countries developed rather than casual workers.
Another reason is that any individual in general and any teenager in particular needs free time to rest and enjoy recreation. Recreation helps adolescents both develop their creativity and have healthy mental abilities. If students work and study at the same time, they might have less free time to play games, enjoy recreation, and do their favorite hobbies, which in turn results in fatigue and depression in the future. Not only does this psychological problem have detrimental effects on the students’ life, but their country also misses the healthy future labor work, which is a precious resource in the development and progress of a nation. Moreover, the country is going to be required to spend an immense amount of its budget for curing mental diseases resulting from working during the schooldays.
In conclusion, I prefer that a student simply studies his or her lessons and does not work at the same time on the grounds that students need to put their concentrations on their lessons in order to succeed in their lessons and acquire better future opportunities, and that they need pastimes to enjoy recreation so as to maintain their mental health. Finally, I wish that any country in the world could pave the way for teenagers to continue their education without that they have to work to afford their education expenditure throughout the schooldays.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, however, if, may, moreover, nevertheless, so, then, well, as to, in addition, in conclusion, in general, in particular, such as, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 10.4613686534 105% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 5.04856512141 139% => OK
Conjunction : 25.0 7.30242825607 342% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 14.0 12.0772626932 116% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 22.412803532 232% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 66.0 30.3222958057 218% => Less preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 13.0 5.01324503311 259% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2389.0 1373.03311258 174% => OK
No of words: 463.0 270.72406181 171% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.15982721382 5.08290768461 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63868890866 4.04702891845 115% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.947424333 2.5805825403 114% => OK
Unique words: 234.0 145.348785872 161% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.505399568035 0.540411800872 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 720.0 419.366225166 172% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 3.25607064018 276% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 3.0 8.23620309051 36% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.51434878587 264% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 2.5761589404 155% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 13.0662251656 115% => OK
Sentence length: 30.0 21.2450331126 141% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 81.6138877071 49.2860985944 166% => OK
Chars per sentence: 159.266666667 110.228320801 144% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.8666666667 21.698381199 142% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.0666666667 7.06452816374 157% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 4.19205298013 48% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 4.33554083885 254% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 4.45695364238 45% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.27373068433 47% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.171507868547 0.272083759551 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0673930387964 0.0996497079465 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.029771574521 0.0662205650399 45% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.114323600319 0.162205337803 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0180406306795 0.0443174109184 41% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.3 13.3589403974 137% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.03 53.8541721854 76% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 5.55761589404 202% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 11.0289183223 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.24 12.2367328918 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.32 8.42419426049 111% => OK
difficult_words: 123.0 63.6247240618 193% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 10.7273730684 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.498013245 133% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.2008830022 134% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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