TPO-03 - Integrated Writing Task Rembrandt is the most famous of the seventeenth-century Dutch painters. However, there are doubts whether some paintings attributed to Rembrandt were actually painted by him. One such painting is known as attributed to Rembrandt.
The reading passage gives a short note doubts on the originality of Rembrandt's work, the most famous Dutch painter if the seventeenth century. It gives information that people feel doubt whether some of his acclaimed work are really done by him or not.
The lecture refutes all of the three doubts cast on a certain painting by the artist by providing research based result of the painting. The passage talks about a painting of a woman which is attributed to his very portrait style but some mismatches are discussed. First of all, the inconsistency of the costume of the woman is confusing. It wears a lilen cap of a type that only servants would wear at that time but it is inconsistent with the fur collar that affluent people could only afford. The lecture refuted this claim as X-ray analysis found that a topping was made later on the original photo by the artist. To increase the painting value it was given a formal look by wearing that fur collar after the color of the original one was fade. The second mismatch discussed in the passage about the lack of sync in light and shadow. The lecture also proved this problem by explaining that the fur collar was further painted. Prior that in the original painting the woman was drawn wearing a light colored dress for which the face was illuminated. So this again proved it to be the original work. The third mismatch is that Rembrandt used to used single wood panel but the painting was on several wood panels glued together. The lecture described the final point that the researcher has proved it that when the painting was edited by another one they glued more than one wooden panel to make it more grand. The original artist used the single panel like his other works. And the most exciting proof is that the actual wooden panel was from the tree from which Rembrandt used another wood panel to draw his self portrait.
So reaching all of the points it is clear that the lecture explanably cast doubt on specific points of the passage doubting the patent of the work by Rembrandt.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 21, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...one by him or not. The lecture refutes all of the three doubts cast on a certain painting...
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Line 2, column 1411, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...one wooden panel to make it more grand. The original artist used the single panel l...
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Line 3, column 13, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...to draw his self portrait. So reaching all of the points it is clear that the lecture exp...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, look, really, second, so, third, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 10.4613686534 172% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 5.04856512141 40% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 7.30242825607 82% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 12.0772626932 141% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 22.412803532 134% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 45.0 30.3222958057 148% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 5.01324503311 20% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1682.0 1373.03311258 123% => OK
No of words: 363.0 270.72406181 134% => OK
Chars per words: 4.63360881543 5.08290768461 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3649236973 4.04702891845 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.33182208322 2.5805825403 90% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 145.348785872 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.493112947658 0.540411800872 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 517.5 419.366225166 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.55342163355 90% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.23620309051 134% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 13.0662251656 130% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 21.2450331126 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.1525592546 49.2860985944 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.9411764706 110.228320801 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.3529411765 21.698381199 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.94117647059 7.06452816374 56% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.09492273731 73% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 4.19205298013 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 4.33554083885 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 4.45695364238 157% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.27373068433 70% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.407741510318 0.272083759551 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.12078422444 0.0996497079465 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0784196727908 0.0662205650399 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.198841337986 0.162205337803 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.15028680709 0.0443174109184 339% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 13.3589403974 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 53.8541721854 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.0289183223 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.57 12.2367328918 78% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.46 8.42419426049 89% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 63.6247240618 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.7273730684 103% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.498013245 99% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.2008830022 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 20 minutes.
Minimum four paragraphs wanted. The correct pattern:
para 1: introduction
para 2: doubt 1
para 3: doubt 2
para 4: doubt 3
Less contents wanted from the reading passages(25%), more content wanted from the lecture (75%).
Don't need a conclusion paragraph.
Read sample essays from ETS:
http://www.testbig.com/users/toeflwritingmaster
Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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