TPO 11
The article states that zoos are essential and provides three reasons of
support. However, the professor explains that activists don’t believe
that zoos benefit animals or society and refutes each of the author's
reasons.
First, the reading states that animals are treated well in zoos. The
professor refutes this point. He states that animals are not treated well.
He explains that in a zoo, two read pandas died from exposure to rat poison.
Zoo safety managers could have prevented this, but were not present. The
professor explains that this proves that zoo administrators show a lack of care
towards animals.
Second, the article claims that zoos are educational. However, the
professor says that zoos are still seen as entertainment. The animals in zoos
attract visitors. They aren’t the animals that the public should really learn
about. Zoos send the message that animals can be used for our own purposes.
He states that though some zoos attempt to inform, we can’t understand them
in zoos because they are in artificial and misleading exhibits.
Third, the reading claims that zoos protect endangered species. The
professor says that this claim is problematic. He explains that the Taamarin is
one successful example but that overall, zoos have a poor success rate. Zoos
possess a small number of an endangered species so they tend to interbreed,
which results in birth defects. Also, he states that zoos offer no advantage to
saving animals in their native habitat.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Support
...al and provides three reasons of support. However, the professor explains that&n...
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Line 9, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Reasons
...;and refutes each of the author's reasons. First, the reading states t...
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Line 15, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Professor
...ls are treated well in zoos. The professor refutes this point. He states that ...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 23, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Towards
...oo administrators show a lack of care towards animals. Second, the article...
^^^^^^^
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Professor
...os are educational. However, the professor says that zoos are still seen as e...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 31, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Attract
...as entertainment. The animals in zoos attract visitors. They aren't the animals ...
^^^^^^^
Line 33, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: About
...s that the public should really learn about. Zoos send the message that animals can...
^^^^^
Line 37, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: In
...inform, we can't understand them in zoos because they are in artificial and...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Professor
...;zoos protect endangered species. The professor says that this claim is problematic. He...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 45, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: One
...tic. He explains that the Taamarin is one successful example but that overall, zo...
^^^
Line 47, column 9, Rule ID: SMALL_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, use 'a few', or use 'some'
Suggestion: a few; some
...ave a poor success rate. Zoos possess a small number of an endangered species so they tend to i...
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Line 49, column 1, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “which” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...d species so they tend to interbreed, which results in birth defects. Also, he stat...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Saving
...tates that zoos offer no advantage to saving animals in their native habitat.
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, really, second, so, still, third, well
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 10.4613686534 96% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 5.04856512141 79% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 7.30242825607 82% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 12.0772626932 157% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 22.412803532 152% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 17.0 30.3222958057 56% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 1.0 5.01324503311 20% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1410.0 1373.03311258 103% => OK
No of words: 233.0 270.72406181 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.05150214592 5.08290768461 119% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.90696013833 4.04702891845 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.58344169162 2.5805825403 139% => OK
Unique words: 142.0 145.348785872 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.609442060086 0.540411800872 113% => OK
syllable_count: 373.5 419.366225166 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 3.25607064018 246% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 10.0 8.23620309051 121% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.51434878587 198% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 13.0662251656 130% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 21.2450331126 61% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.5430437424 49.2860985944 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.9411764706 110.228320801 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.7058823529 21.698381199 63% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.05882352941 7.06452816374 57% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 20.0 4.09492273731 488% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 13.0 4.19205298013 310% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 4.33554083885 208% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 4.45695364238 135% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.27373068433 47% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0680979356459 0.272083759551 25% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0298745795765 0.0996497079465 30% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0273375207084 0.0662205650399 41% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0287524542859 0.162205337803 18% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0287649368235 0.0443174109184 65% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 13.3589403974 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.28 53.8541721854 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 11.0289183223 76% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 17.22 12.2367328918 141% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.42 8.42419426049 100% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 63.6247240618 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.7273730684 56% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.2 10.498013245 69% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.2008830022 71% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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