TPO-13 - Integrated Writing Task Private collectors have been selling and buying fossils, the petrified remains of ancient organisms, ever since the eighteenth century. In recent years, however, the sale of fossils, particularly of dinosaurs and other lar

The reading and the lecture are both discussing private collectors, who sell and buy fossils. The author of the reading believes that they have negative effects on both scientists and public. The lecturer casts doubt on the claims made in the article. He says that these commercial collectors actually have more advantageous then downsides.

First of all, the author points out that because of private ownership the public do not have the access to many fossils and eventually people will have less interest in fossils. This point is challenged by the lecturer. He says that the fossils are greatly exposed to the public, as many huge organizations and schools can buy the fossils and expose them to many people.

Secondly, the author contends that scientists will also lose access to important and rare fossils. The lecturer rebuts this argument. He says that before collectors can buy a fossil, it must be evaluated by scientists. So, scientists still have the opportunity to study the fossils.

Finally, the author states that private collectors may destroy some important details while unearthing, as they do not pay much attention to the field work. The lecture, on the other hand, posits that it is better to have many discovered fossils than having less. Many scientists do not have enough budget to do many kinds of research, so it is good that other people like collectors discover new fossils even if they destroy some evidence.

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Average: 6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 193, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... effects on both scientists and public. The lecturer casts doubt on the claims made...
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Line 1, column 326, Rule ID: LESS_MORE_THEN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'than'?
Suggestion: than
...lectors actually have more advantageous then downsides. First of all, the author ...
^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, finally, first, if, may, second, secondly, so, still, then, while, first of all, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 10.4613686534 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 5.04856512141 119% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 7.30242825607 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 12.0772626932 83% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 22.412803532 98% => OK
Preposition: 22.0 30.3222958057 73% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 5.01324503311 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1211.0 1373.03311258 88% => OK
No of words: 239.0 270.72406181 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.06694560669 5.08290768461 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.93187294222 4.04702891845 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58413510502 2.5805825403 100% => OK
Unique words: 130.0 145.348785872 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.543933054393 0.540411800872 101% => OK
syllable_count: 365.4 419.366225166 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 3.25607064018 154% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.23620309051 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 13.0662251656 107% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 21.2450331126 80% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 45.270164072 49.2860985944 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.5 110.228320801 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0714285714 21.698381199 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.5 7.06452816374 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 4.19205298013 48% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 4.33554083885 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 4.45695364238 135% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.27373068433 47% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.360097893507 0.272083759551 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.113564791981 0.0996497079465 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0763801696292 0.0662205650399 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.219325410442 0.162205337803 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0578752007324 0.0443174109184 131% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 13.3589403974 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 53.8541721854 116% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 11.0289183223 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.83 12.2367328918 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.72 8.42419426049 92% => OK
difficult_words: 49.0 63.6247240618 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.7273730684 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.498013245 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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