TPO-13 - Integrated Writing Task Private collectors have been selling and buying fossils, the petrified remains of ancient organisms, ever since the eighteenth century. In recent years, however, the sale of fossils, particularly of dinosaurs and other lar

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TPO-13 - Integrated Writing Task Private collectors have been selling and buying fossils, the petrified remains of ancient organisms, ever since the eighteenth century. In recent years, however, the sale of fossils, particularly of dinosaurs and other lar

The reading and the lecture are both about the advantages of collecting fossil by private collectors. The author of the reading believes that it has negative effect on scientific research and for the general public due to it is becoming privatized. However, the lecturer casts doubts about the claims made in the article and refutes all the theories presented in the reading passage.

First of all, the author of the reading points out that fossils are not being showcased at museum for everybody to see but private individuals are buying it for their personal collection. The author mentioned that the public suffer the most because they are less chance they can glance at the precious fossils, thus their interest on it might decline. The point is challenged by the lecturer. He says that the public are more aware of the fossil stones. Furthermore, he argues that more fossils are being purchased in the market, thus, allowing school, library, museums to display their collection to the public.

Secondly, the author contents that scientist miss the opportunity to learn more about the history, characteristics of the fossils which means fewer discoveries can be taken into account. The article notes that collectors buy the most rarest fossils and spend fortune for them to acquire it whereas scientist and universities have only limited fossils to study because they cannot afford it. The lecturer rebuts this argument. He suggests that it is not true that scientist cannot study the fossils. He elaborates on this by mentioning that before collectors acquire it, they are the first people to examine and study the fossils, hence scientist have a lot of time to gather needed data and information on this fossil.

Lastly, the author states that private collectors somehow destroy scientific evidence with the fossil. The author establishes that majority of the enthusiast are not well trained or uninterested in documenting the history of the fossil. The lecturer, on the other hand, posits that there must be collateral damage in order to attain such precious fossil. He puts forth the idea that even if there are many fossils available they may become undiscovered because people are afraid that some fossils will be damaged.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 201, Rule ID: GENERAL_XX[1]
Message: Use simply 'public'.
Suggestion: public
...fect on scientific research and for the general public due to it is becoming privatized. Howev...
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Line 5, column 230, Rule ID: MOST_SUPERLATIVE[1]
Message: Use only 'rarest' (without 'most') when you use the superlative.
Suggestion: rarest
...e article notes that collectors buy the most rarest fossils and spend fortune for them to a...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 230, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'most the rarest'.
Suggestion: most the rarest
...e article notes that collectors buy the most rarest fossils and spend fortune for them to a...
^^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, hence, however, if, lastly, may, second, secondly, so, thus, well, whereas, first of all, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 10.4613686534 172% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 5.04856512141 158% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 7.30242825607 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 12.0772626932 132% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 22.412803532 178% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 41.0 30.3222958057 135% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 5.01324503311 100% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1877.0 1373.03311258 137% => OK
No of words: 365.0 270.72406181 135% => OK
Chars per words: 5.14246575342 5.08290768461 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37092360658 4.04702891845 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60116751361 2.5805825403 101% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 145.348785872 132% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.52602739726 0.540411800872 97% => OK
syllable_count: 584.1 419.366225166 139% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 3.25607064018 184% => OK
Article: 12.0 8.23620309051 146% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 13.0662251656 130% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 21.2450331126 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.2035762811 49.2860985944 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.411764706 110.228320801 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4705882353 21.698381199 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.76470588235 7.06452816374 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 4.19205298013 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 4.33554083885 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 4.45695364238 202% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.27373068433 70% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.497446272935 0.272083759551 183% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.154234150449 0.0996497079465 155% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0932098611448 0.0662205650399 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.29205043417 0.162205337803 180% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0838377527816 0.0443174109184 189% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 13.3589403974 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 53.8541721854 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.0289183223 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.53 12.2367328918 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.49 8.42419426049 101% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 63.6247240618 138% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.7273730684 103% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.498013245 99% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.2008830022 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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