TPO 24 Integrated TOEFL Writing
The reading and the lecture are both about that recent T.rex fossils contain actual tussues that are supposed to be not found in the animal. The author of the reading feels that this fossils data contains the materials of some living organisms. The lecturer challenges the claims made by the author. He is of the opinion that those scientists reveal data sound like skeptical.
To begin with, the author argues that small branching channels indide the fossils maybe the actual blood vessels of the dinosaur. the article mentons the soft and delicate substance could be the actual organisms of the T.rex. The lecturer is challenged the point made by the author. He claims those organism in the channel maybe the organ of some bacteria's residue. He also says those branching is the traces of some bacteria.
Secondly, the writer suggests that the presence of spheres contained iron materils. The article stated that those materials maybe the red blood cells of the T.rex. The lecturer, however, rebuts the point by mentioning that those red materials are actually some other minerals. He elaborates on this by bringing up the point the those reddish color pobably the other things instead of red blood cells.
Finally, the author posits that the presence of collagen maybe the materials of T,rex fossils. In the article, it is mentions that collagen is the main component of that fossil bone. In contrasts, the lecturer's positions is collagen are surviived that long time that are found the scientists. HE notes that that are maybe human skins of the researchers.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 184, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'fossils'' or 'fossil's'?
Suggestion: fossils'; fossil's
...e author of the reading feels that this fossils data contains the materials of some li...
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Line 1, column 209, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...eels that this fossils data contains the materials of some living organisms. The ...
^^
Line 1, column 247, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...he materials of some living organisms. The lecturer challenges the claims made by ...
^^^
Line 3, column 131, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: The
...e actual blood vessels of the dinosaur. the article mentons the soft and delicate s...
^^^
Line 3, column 294, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this organism' or 'those organisms'?
Suggestion: this organism; those organisms
...the point made by the author. He claims those organism in the channel maybe the organ of some ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 82, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , rex
...nce of collagen maybe the materials of T,rex fossils. In the article, it is mentions...
^^^^
Line 7, column 303, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: that
...that are found the scientists. HE notes that that are maybe human skins of the researcher...
^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, finally, however, may, second, secondly, so, in contrast, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 10.4613686534 134% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 5.04856512141 20% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 7.30242825607 27% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 15.0 12.0772626932 124% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 22.412803532 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 29.0 30.3222958057 96% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 5.01324503311 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1315.0 1373.03311258 96% => OK
No of words: 260.0 270.72406181 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.05769230769 5.08290768461 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.01553427287 4.04702891845 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.41071020005 2.5805825403 93% => OK
Unique words: 127.0 145.348785872 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.488461538462 0.540411800872 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 393.3 419.366225166 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 3.25607064018 184% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.23620309051 134% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 13.0662251656 130% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 21.2450331126 71% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 25.2901501676 49.2860985944 51% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 77.3529411765 110.228320801 70% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.2941176471 21.698381199 70% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.41176470588 7.06452816374 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 4.19205298013 167% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 4.33554083885 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 4.45695364238 45% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.27373068433 281% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.285411685247 0.272083759551 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0920054364833 0.0996497079465 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0675673083432 0.0662205650399 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.168259818863 0.162205337803 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0253015956796 0.0443174109184 57% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.0 13.3589403974 75% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 53.8541721854 120% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 11.0289183223 73% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.48 12.2367328918 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.69 8.42419426049 103% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 63.6247240618 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.7273730684 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.498013245 76% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.2008830022 71% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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