TPO-25 - Integrated Writing Task

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TPO-25 - Integrated Writing Task

In Iraq. archaeologists have found some clay jars which have been made of 2 inner layers: 1) an iron rod 2) a copper cylinder that have surronded the rod. The experts have beilived that it hadn't been used to as an electrical battery! There are some reasons to reject their opinion:
They have mentioned that an electrical battery needs some metal wires as conducters; If the local people had had a electricity source, how could have used it and taken advantages of it. The response to this problem is that the archaeologists had ignored other objects they had found near the jars. That objects could play the conducter's roll instead of metal wires.
Copper cylinders had been found in Seleucia in advanced. They had been used to protect secret texts. According to the lecture, the cylinders could be used in order to create batteries too. There is no problem for using them multifacely.
The last reason have made by the experts is that the electrical vessels how could help the local people, while they hadn't had any applience to work with electricity. The professor said that some of possible usage of them: getting shock to patients and reducing their pain (medical), showing magical power to other people (as a source of strange and invisible power).
So it is possible that local people had used the clay jars as an generator device.

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Average: 7.6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 10, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Archaeologists
In Iraq. archaeologists have found some clay jars which have be...
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Line 1, column 188, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: hadn't
... rod. The experts have beilived that it hadnt been used to as an electrical battery! ...
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Line 2, column 106, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: had
...ires as conducters; If the local people had had a electricity source, how could have us...
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Line 2, column 114, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...conducters; If the local people had had a electricity source, how could have used...
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Line 3, column 17, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...nstead of metal wires. Copper cylinders had been found in Seleucia in advanced. ...
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Line 4, column 117, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: hadn't
...could help the local people, while they hadnt had any applience to work with electric...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 63, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
... local people had used the clay jars as an generator device.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, so, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 10.4613686534 96% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 5.04856512141 79% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 7.30242825607 41% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 12.0772626932 75% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 22.412803532 94% => OK
Preposition: 22.0 30.3222958057 73% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 5.01324503311 20% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1106.0 1373.03311258 81% => OK
No of words: 231.0 270.72406181 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.78787878788 5.08290768461 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.89854898053 4.04702891845 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50621311488 2.5805825403 97% => OK
Unique words: 125.0 145.348785872 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.541125541126 0.540411800872 100% => OK
syllable_count: 344.7 419.366225166 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 3.25607064018 92% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.23620309051 61% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 13.0662251656 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 21.2450331126 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 80.3911876735 49.2860985944 163% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.545454545 110.228320801 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0 21.698381199 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.18181818182 7.06452816374 17% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 4.19205298013 167% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 4.33554083885 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 4.45695364238 90% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.27373068433 70% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.399568343152 0.272083759551 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.140187991708 0.0996497079465 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0841452111346 0.0662205650399 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.2172790797 0.162205337803 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0690318463869 0.0443174109184 156% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 13.3589403974 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 53.8541721854 109% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.0289183223 93% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.5 12.2367328918 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.96 8.42419426049 94% => OK
difficult_words: 48.0 63.6247240618 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 10.7273730684 177% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.498013245 99% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.2008830022 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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