TPO-42 Integrated task
The lecture and the reading are about injuries to birds related to glass. The reading states several solutions to prevent these kinds of injuries. However, the professor casts doubt on what is presented in the text and refutes all the solutions mentioned in the reading. He does not feel that these measures are as beneficial as the author assumes.
First of all, the lecture argues that the first measure, one way glass, would reflect like mirror to the outside birds. In fact it will be very bad for them because they do not understand mirror. They will think the reflection of sky as the real sky and will fly through it, which can cause injuries to them. The reading passage, however, argues that such a glass would not allow birds to see in and they will not try to fly through the glass.
Secondly, regarding the second solution, colorful designs, the lecturer explains that birds will perceive the designs like stripes as open wholes and will try to fly right through it, which again can lead injuries to the birds. If the glasses are painted with stripes, the gaps between them should be extremely small, but it will make the building too dark for inside people. The reading passage gives the opposite view that birds would avoid flying through the stripes.
Finally, the lecturer objects to the third measure - use of magnetic field. She points out that birds sense the magnetic field only when traveling long distances for example, when migrating from a cold country to hot country. For moving short distances they use eyes. Therefore, building equipped with electromagnetic fields will not have much effect. This is in direct contradiction with the claim in the reading passage that birds will sense the magnetic signals of the powerful electromagnets in the building and will direct themselves away from the building.
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Essay evaluation report
In fact it will be very bad for them because they do not understand mirror.
In fact it will be very bad for birds because they do not understand mirror.
flaws:
1. 'they', 'them' refers to what? Be sensitive to use pronouns in the first reason.
2. No. of Words: 310 250
Write the essay in 20 minutes.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 24 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 1 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 16 12
No. of Words: 310 250
No. of Characters: 1483 1200
No. of Different Words: 160 150
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.196 4.2
Average Word Length: 4.784 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.298 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 100 80
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 82 60
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 41 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 19 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.375 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.336 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.562 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.316 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.53 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.132 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 4
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, however, if, regarding, second, secondly, so, therefore, third, for example, in fact, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 10.4613686534 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 5.04856512141 317% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 7.0 7.30242825607 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 12.0772626932 91% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 22.412803532 107% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 30.3222958057 139% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 5.01324503311 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1528.0 1373.03311258 111% => OK
No of words: 310.0 270.72406181 115% => OK
Chars per words: 4.92903225806 5.08290768461 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.19604776685 4.04702891845 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.3789736261 2.5805825403 92% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 145.348785872 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.554838709677 0.540411800872 103% => OK
syllable_count: 441.0 419.366225166 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.55342163355 90% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 3.25607064018 123% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.23620309051 109% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 13.0662251656 122% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 21.2450331126 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.5885807798 49.2860985944 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.5 110.228320801 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.375 21.698381199 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.4375 7.06452816374 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 4.19205298013 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.27373068433 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.470452713156 0.272083759551 173% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.134042316113 0.0996497079465 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0893502662796 0.0662205650399 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.255507758574 0.162205337803 158% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0824943107806 0.0443174109184 186% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 13.3589403974 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 53.8541721854 128% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 11.0289183223 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.31 12.2367328918 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.58 8.42419426049 90% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 63.6247240618 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.7273730684 56% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.498013245 91% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.2008830022 71% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 85.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.5 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.