tpo-45

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tpo-45

In the set of materials, the reading passage talks about some theory that show the fossil structures that discovery can't bee nests and the listening passage talks about the same issue but provide some extra information to prove the fossil structures that discovered can be bee nests.

According to the reading passage, this structure can’t be bee nests because of three reasons. first, no fossil remains of actual bees have ever been found that date 200 million years ago. The earliest body of the bee is 100 million years ago. second, today’s bees feed almost on the flowers of flowering plants and flower plants first appeared on earth 125 million years ago, so the bee can’t be before the flower plants. The last reason is, chambers of modern bee nest are closed by caps that a spiral pattern, but the fossilized chambers lake such caps.

The professor in the listening passage says that the argument of the reading passage is not convincing and bee nest can be at that time, because of three reasons. first, there aren’t any convincing idea that shows bee didn’t exist before that time, therefore the first idea of the reading passage proved unconvincing. second, flower plants don’t exist at that time but maybe the bees feed on unflowering plants because at that time unflowering plants existed, so the writer’s second idea rebutted. Third, the modern chamber containing one social water proof material that the old chamber had this material too, thus reliably the last reason of reading passage retorted.

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Average: 0.3 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 117, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...ow the fossil structures that discovery cant bee nests and the listening passage tal...
^^^^
Line 3, column 100, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: First
... be bee nests because of three reasons. first, no fossil remains of actual bees have ...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 249, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Second
...dy of the bee is 100 million years ago. second, today's bees feed almost on the f...
^^^^^^
Line 5, column 164, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: First
...at that time, because of three reasons. first, there aren't any convincing idea ...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 329, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Second
...he reading passage proved unconvincing. second, flower plants don't exist at that...
^^^^^^
Line 5, column 567, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled as one.
Suggestion: waterproof
...he modern chamber containing one social water proof material that the old chamber had this ...
^^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, may, second, so, therefore, third, thus

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 10.4613686534 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 5.04856512141 79% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 7.30242825607 82% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 12.0772626932 99% => OK
Pronoun: 14.0 22.412803532 62% => OK
Preposition: 25.0 30.3222958057 82% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 5.01324503311 40% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1299.0 1373.03311258 95% => OK
No of words: 254.0 270.72406181 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.11417322835 5.08290768461 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.99216450694 4.04702891845 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49192694905 2.5805825403 97% => OK
Unique words: 132.0 145.348785872 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.51968503937 0.540411800872 96% => OK
syllable_count: 383.4 419.366225166 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 3.25607064018 31% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.23620309051 61% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 13.0662251656 77% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 21.2450331126 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.6386840227 49.2860985944 123% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.9 110.228320801 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.4 21.698381199 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.1 7.06452816374 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.09492273731 73% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 6.0 4.19205298013 143% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 4.33554083885 23% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 4.45695364238 45% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.27373068433 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0681360753761 0.272083759551 25% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0303362831609 0.0996497079465 30% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0195150300959 0.0662205650399 29% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0504024962025 0.162205337803 31% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00411958193774 0.0443174109184 9% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 13.3589403974 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 53.8541721854 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.0289183223 108% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 12.2367328918 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.05 8.42419426049 96% => OK
difficult_words: 51.0 63.6247240618 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.7273730684 98% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.498013245 114% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.2008830022 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum four paragraphs wanted. The correct pattern:

para 1: introduction
para 2: doubt 1
para 3: doubt 2
para 4: doubt 3

Less contents wanted from the reading passages(25%), more content wanted from the lecture (75%).

Don't need a conclusion paragraph.

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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