TPO-46 - Integrated Writing Task

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TPO-46 - Integrated Writing Task

Both the reading passage and the lecture focus on differential points of view on whether it is beneficial to record medical information in electronic databases or on paper. However, the materials provided by the author indicate that electronic storage bases are more lucrative. The lecture, on the other hand, provides evidence to refute perspectives in the reading passage.
Fist, the reading delineate that electronic records are not costly and they dont accumulate too much spaces. Further more they can be easily duplicated or moved to be used in different places. In contrast the professor contradicts that by saying that keeping electronical records is also prohibited and and they just are holding as emergency.
Second, the author concedes that electronic medical records decrease the prospective errors and will prevent the serious and perilous consequences of handwriting errors. However, the lecturer casts a shadow of debts on that because many doctors use pen to record their patients background in their offices at examinations so electronical records will not conclusively eliminate the mistakes
Last, the reading believe that electronical records will provide doctors with thousands of patients record even in their houses or any research locations. The professors oppose that by saying, there are many strict laws that prevented doctors to inform about any patient records without permission. And she mentions that many patient have blocked their medical records.

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Average: 7.6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 338, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... other hand, provides evidence to refute perspectives in the reading passage. Fi...
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Line 2, column 77, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...ctronic records are not costly and they dont accumulate too much spaces. Further mor...
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Line 2, column 97, Rule ID: MUCH_COUNTABLE[1]
Message: Use 'many' with countable nouns.
Suggestion: many
...not costly and they dont accumulate too much spaces. Further more they can be easily...
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Line 2, column 196, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[2]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: contrast,
...oved to be used in different places. In contrast the professor contradicts that by sayin...
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Line 2, column 299, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: and
...electronical records is also prohibited and and they just are holding as emergency. Se...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, second, so, in contrast, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 10.4613686534 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 5.04856512141 79% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 7.30242825607 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 12.0772626932 83% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 22.412803532 85% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 30.3222958057 89% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 5.01324503311 40% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1261.0 1373.03311258 92% => OK
No of words: 226.0 270.72406181 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.5796460177 5.08290768461 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.87727950738 4.04702891845 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81907026829 2.5805825403 109% => OK
Unique words: 136.0 145.348785872 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.601769911504 0.540411800872 111% => OK
syllable_count: 397.8 419.366225166 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.55342163355 116% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 3.25607064018 0% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.23620309051 85% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 13.0662251656 77% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 21.2450331126 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 83.345605763 49.2860985944 169% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.1 110.228320801 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6 21.698381199 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.1 7.06452816374 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 4.19205298013 119% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 4.33554083885 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 4.45695364238 90% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.27373068433 23% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.478385296158 0.272083759551 176% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.169895525535 0.0996497079465 170% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0952792918044 0.0662205650399 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.281073549461 0.162205337803 173% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0639501777679 0.0443174109184 144% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.2 13.3589403974 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 32.22 53.8541721854 60% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 5.55761589404 202% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.0289183223 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.38 12.2367328918 126% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.9 8.42419426049 118% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 63.6247240618 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.7273730684 84% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.498013245 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.2008830022 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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