TPO-32 - Independent Writing Task
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Young people today have no influence on the important decisions that determine the future of society as a whole.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In ancient time, in each region, a groupe of elite and aristocracy people who govern the society made the critical decision for all the society but through history, dictatory has been superseded by democracy in which all people regardless of social position and income, participate in election and ultimately in making decisions. There has been an overwhelming controversy on which cluster among people have to undertake such responsibilities the most. whereas some are inclined toward the opinion that juveniles determine the trajectory of a sample society, on the other extreme of the rope the opposite view has its proponents. I am to a great extent on the belief of the letter statement. The following reasons would elaborate on the thesis.
To commence, one of the first compelling reasons that justifies the thesis is that, reputation is an element that is set to assume a great influence on ones role in society. To advocate this statement, just presume, you encounter a respective person, you will spontaneously find some ways through which show honor to him or her. Reputation can not be easily obtained in one day. It intertwine with age. you should gain a lot of experience and thriving which is not possible unless by getting old and throughout years. By considering politicians as momentous people who adjust the future regulation and contex of the respective society, we obviously conclude that one should try his or her life out to become influencer in a society. So it goes without saying that many politicians are old and white- hair. Furthermore many reputation people have accumulated considerable amount of money, wealth and affluence which consequently have increased their power and potent in society. As a result, it is crystal clear that the future of a society would not be overtaken by young people who couldn't compete with this prosperous people. In the last resort, they just could be helpful in selecting them as a determiner.
Another equally significant point to be mentioned is that, adolescent on the other hand, are not qualified and confident enough to lead the society that wouldn't recognize them. Many young people are far away from aspiring their desires and mess with their ordinary and daily decisions. For example the most obsession of their thoughts is to choose their sought-after major among all career for their future or being as up-to-date as possible in trends or other rudimentary materials. You will hardly find a juvenile who could criticize the diplomacy of her or his country in international world. Maybe some argue that many professors of universities are under the third-day of their life. But we should keep in our mind that it's very difficult to obtain empirical knowledge which is necessary to undertake crucial task during studying books and virtually is impossible. That's why it has been stated in many legitimacy of different countries, included developed or developing countries, that politicians are prevented to be designated under 30 years old for verity of tasks.
Based on the disscussion and by taking all of the aforementioned ideas into consideration it can be easily uphold that young people aren't influencer in making staple and vital decisions like politician in most of the countries as they haven't blossomed in prosperity and they are engaged in their own decisions.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, furthermore, if, may, so, third, whereas, for example, as a result, on the other hand, to a great extent
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 15.1003584229 172% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 24.0 13.8261648746 174% => OK
Relative clauses : 23.0 11.0286738351 209% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 84.0 52.1666666667 161% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2802.0 1977.66487455 142% => OK
No of words: 546.0 407.700716846 134% => OK
Chars per words: 5.13186813187 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.83390555256 4.48103885553 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89387953622 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 293.0 212.727598566 138% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.53663003663 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 900.0 618.680645161 145% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 75.9624820339 48.9658058833 155% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.826086957 100.406767564 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.7391304348 20.6045352989 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.65217391304 5.45110844103 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 5.5376344086 235% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.151680880457 0.236089414692 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0412513495753 0.076458572812 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0337756601424 0.0737576698707 46% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0917801026779 0.150856017488 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0335060844991 0.0645574589148 52% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 11.7677419355 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.77 10.9000537634 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.2 8.01818996416 115% => OK
difficult_words: 153.0 86.8835125448 176% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 20.5 10.002688172 205% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.