TPO 46- In the United States, medical information about patients traditionally has been recorded and stored on paper forms. However, there are efforts to persuade doctors to adopt electronic medical record systems in which information about patients is stored in electronic databases rather than on paper. It is argued that storing patients' medical records in electronic databases has several advantages over traditional paper-based record keeping.
The reading and lecture are both about whether traditional medical records are more efficient compared to electronic medical database. The author of the reading believes that electronic medical chart has many advantages over the traditional method. However, the lecturer casts doubts about the claims made in the passage, saying that the benefits of electronic records are uncertain.
First of all, the author points out that electronic database can help reduce the cost of storing and transferring of medical data. The article states that traditional method requires huge storage space while electronic records virtually needs no space. Conversely, the point is challenged by the lecturer. She says that doctors cannot save on cost because they will not throw out paper records, it is needed as a legal document. Furthermore, she argues that physician still pay for storage keeping even they adapted the electronic database.
Secondly, the author contends that electronic method eliminates medical error. The article establishes that electronic recording has standardize forms and data are legible fonts that help minimize human error in the process. On the contrary, the lecture rebuts this argument. She suggests that electronic records does not eliminate error, thus, doctor still write their assessment in their notes and prescription in the paper form. Moreover, she elaborates on this by mentioning that the staff are responsible for transcribing the data written in the chart, so it is possible that they can still commit mistakes in understanding the notes of the physician. Thus, the standpoint contradicts the passage.
Finally, the author states that electronic database can help medical research by gaining a lot of information from the patient records. The lecturer, on the other hand, posits that researchers are having difficulty accessing the clients record due to their access are limited and are subjected to strict privacy laws. She puts forth the idea that medical researchers needs approval from the patient in order to study their chart. Hence, most often patients refuse the their chart to be used by other people and they can block someone who tries browsing their information.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 134, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'standardized'.
Suggestion: standardized
...tablishes that electronic recording has standardize forms and data are legible fonts that h...
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Line 7, column 465, Rule ID: DT_PRP[1]
Message: Possible typo. Did you mean 'the' or 'their'?
Suggestion: the; their
...hart. Hence, most often patients refuse the their chart to be used by other people and th...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, conversely, finally, first, furthermore, hence, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, still, thus, while, first of all, on the contrary, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 10.4613686534 115% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 5.04856512141 119% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 7.30242825607 82% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 12.0772626932 132% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 22.412803532 152% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 34.0 30.3222958057 112% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 5.01324503311 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1869.0 1373.03311258 136% => OK
No of words: 343.0 270.72406181 127% => OK
Chars per words: 5.44897959184 5.08290768461 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30351707066 4.04702891845 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67980941622 2.5805825403 104% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 145.348785872 131% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.553935860058 0.540411800872 103% => OK
syllable_count: 573.3 419.366225166 137% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.55342163355 109% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 3.25607064018 184% => OK
Article: 12.0 8.23620309051 146% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 13.0662251656 138% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 21.2450331126 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.8729929019 49.2860985944 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.833333333 110.228320801 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0555555556 21.698381199 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.22222222222 7.06452816374 131% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 4.19205298013 48% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 4.33554083885 185% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 4.45695364238 202% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.27373068433 23% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.498668953491 0.272083759551 183% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.145325127133 0.0996497079465 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0982718285846 0.0662205650399 148% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.299958209852 0.162205337803 185% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0219447344638 0.0443174109184 50% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 13.3589403974 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 53.8541721854 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.0289183223 108% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.33 12.2367328918 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.91 8.42419426049 106% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 63.6247240618 148% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.7273730684 84% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.498013245 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 81.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.5 Out of 30
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