TPO 51

Essay topics:

TPO 51

The auther of the passage is so facinated by elephents and counts three supposedly bliefs about them based on the elephents' behaviors. On the contrary, the lecturer casts doubt on those bliefs by explaining the real reasons behind those behaviors and refute all of the passage's bleifs about elephents.

First, the passage brings up the behavior of old elephents in which they get away from their herd when they get old and go alone to vicinities of water -what is called "elephent graveyards"- to die alone. Consequently the auther counts this behavior as a sign for elephents to be aware of their time of death. Conversely, the lecturer underlines the fact that this behavior is a result of decay in elephents teeths and the chewing difficulty for old elephents. Therefore, the old elephents must find softer forms of vegetation which is abundant near the water. So the real reason for old elephents to get away from their herds is to find an appropriate source of food for themselves.

Second, the passage mentions the ability in elephents to paint as an artistic instinct in them. In contrast, the lecturer claims that the elephents have no sens of what they are drawing and the drawing skill is tought to them by manipulating elephents' sensitive ears. Elephents get trained to assign a particular move of paint-brush simultaneusly when a specific part of their ear is touched.

Finally, the passage proposes that the elephents are afraid of mice. In the other hand, the lecturer refutes this idea by mentioning that elephents' fear of mice is due to the fact that they are unfamiliar with mice. She further brings up the example of elephents in Zoos that are not afraid of mice because they have got familiar with them and understood there is no harm from mice.

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Average: 0.3 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 259, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...asons behind those behaviors and refute all of the passages bleifs about elephents. Fir...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 216, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Consequently,
...lephent graveyards'- to die alone. Consequently the auther counts this behavior as a si...
^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 291, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'assigning'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'train' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: assigning
...s sensitive ears. Elephents get trained to assign a particular move of paint-brush simult...
^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, conversely, finally, first, if, second, so, therefore, in contrast, on the contrary

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 10.4613686534 134% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 5.04856512141 20% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 7.30242825607 82% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 12.0772626932 83% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 22.412803532 116% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 30.3222958057 165% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 5.01324503311 20% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1482.0 1373.03311258 108% => OK
No of words: 302.0 270.72406181 112% => OK
Chars per words: 4.90728476821 5.08290768461 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1687104957 4.04702891845 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76011204468 2.5805825403 107% => OK
Unique words: 149.0 145.348785872 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.493377483444 0.540411800872 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 452.7 419.366225166 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 3.25607064018 31% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.23620309051 109% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 13.0662251656 99% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 21.2450331126 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.6632541087 49.2860985944 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.0 110.228320801 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.2307692308 21.698381199 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.46153846154 7.06452816374 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 4.19205298013 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 4.33554083885 23% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 4.45695364238 135% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.27373068433 140% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.272083759551 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.0996497079465 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0662205650399 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.162205337803 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0443174109184 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 13.3589403974 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 53.8541721854 105% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.0289183223 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 12.2367328918 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.91 8.42419426049 94% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 63.6247240618 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.7273730684 131% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.498013245 107% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.2008830022 125% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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