TPO 53 Writing
The reading and the lecture both are debating on the possibility of imposing an extra tax on unhealthy foods; like the policy that has been applied to tobacco. The author of the reading feels, this method has three benefits; on another side, the lecturer challenged the points mentioned by the author. She is of the opinion that all the benefits are controversial.
To begin with, the author argues, by increasing unhealthy foods' tax, people's desire to buy such food will decline. The article mentions that growing cigarette tax has caused a significant decline in tobacco consumption between people. The lecturer challenged this specific argument. She claims, in this way, smokers will buy cheaper cigarettes and foods that have more adverse effects in comparison to the regular ones.
Secondly, the writer suggests that taking this tax is fair because the people that smoke cigarettes and eat unhealthy foods are more vulnerable to diseases with respect to others; as a result, governments should spend much of their revenue on these people's remedies. The lecturer, however, rebuts this idea by mentioning that the concept of "fair" could be different for any people. In this way, people with less income will be more affected by this rule, as the tax does not take into account the income; it gives rise to an unfair feeling in them.
Finally, the writer posits that in this method, the government will have a great source of income. The government can spend this money to prepare other facilities like cinema and public education for people. In contrast, the lecturer's position is that as this revenue is big perhaps, the government deeply will be dependent to this source of money; therefore, they will be reluctant to imply restricted rules on cigarette and unhealthy foods consumption and even in a subtle way, they advocate of such products.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 110, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...mposing an extra tax on unhealthy foods; like the policy that has been applied to...
^^
Line 13, column 437, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'foods'' or 'food's'?
Suggestion: foods'; food's
...ricted rules on cigarette and unhealthy foods consumption and even in a subtle way, t...
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Line 13, column 464, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a subtle way" with adverb for "subtle"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...nd unhealthy foods consumption and even in a subtle way, they advocate of such products.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, however, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, in contrast, as a result, to begin with, with respect to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 10.4613686534 115% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 5.04856512141 178% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 7.30242825607 82% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 12.0772626932 75% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 28.0 22.412803532 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 42.0 30.3222958057 139% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 5.01324503311 160% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1569.0 1373.03311258 114% => OK
No of words: 306.0 270.72406181 113% => OK
Chars per words: 5.12745098039 5.08290768461 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18244613648 4.04702891845 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64300706609 2.5805825403 102% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 145.348785872 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.552287581699 0.540411800872 102% => OK
syllable_count: 481.5 419.366225166 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 3.25607064018 184% => OK
Article: 13.0 8.23620309051 158% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 2.5761589404 272% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 13.0662251656 99% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 21.2450331126 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 69.2558928772 49.2860985944 141% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.692307692 110.228320801 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.5384615385 21.698381199 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.92307692308 7.06452816374 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 4.19205298013 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 4.33554083885 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 4.45695364238 157% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.27373068433 23% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.272083759551 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.0996497079465 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0662205650399 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.162205337803 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0443174109184 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 13.3589403974 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 53.8541721854 89% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.0289183223 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.77 12.2367328918 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.06 8.42419426049 108% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 63.6247240618 130% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.7273730684 98% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.498013245 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.2008830022 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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