Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Governments should spend more money in support of arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
How a government should spend the budget is one of the most controversial questions between scientists and even common people. Annually many articles are published to deal with it, which is a sign of the subject's importance. Some people are of the opinion that sport is more important than art; the reason is that it directly relates to people's health. Personally, I believe that it is a good way for a government to focus on art. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I am going to explore in the following essay.
First and foremost, I think there is a point that we are neglected about it. When we speak about health, our focus is only on physical side of life; usually, we forget our immaterial life. It is clear that Art approachs to this aspect of humans; therefore, attention to art is critical and inveitable. Some days ago, I read an article from a major journal; in the article, the author has argued that mind's health is a key poin in success of an athlet, by the following the writer mentioned that nowadays many sport's teams use art for their people. In this way, they will be more calm and energitic. As a result, we can conclude that art is prior to sport in the society.
The second, occasionally, media desires are toward the sport and sport's events. In this situation, many companies prefer to support athelts. They advertise their products by athelts. For example, some of companies ask of athelts to advertise companies' products in their social media. In this way, many of them have a great income and it is a prevalent and true fact in society that athelts are rich. In contrast, artists need government fund to follow their work. In another side, art deeply realtes to the city's appearance. Governments use artists for designing cities and creat the city more attractive. As instance, in my home town, the government's boards, annually, hold a competition between artists; artists present their plans in a meeting and eventually the best of those plans will be selected. The winner besides many rewards, is obligated to implement the entitled plan.
To wrap up, it is proper for governments to spend the fund on artistic projects. It relates to our immaterial life's aspect that usually is neglected. Furtheremore; artists income incomparison to athelts is more less, because athelets are in focus of big companies and media.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 205, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'subjects'' or 'subject's'?
Suggestion: subjects'; subject's
...to deal with it, which is a sign of the subjects importance. Some people are of the opin...
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Message: The verb after "to" should be in the base form: 'people'.
Suggestion: people
...e reason is that it directly relates to peoples health. Personally, I believe that it i...
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Message: After 'some of', you should use 'the' ('some of the companies') or simply say ''some companies''.
Suggestion: some of the companies; some companies
...their products by athelts. For example, some of companies ask of athelts to advertise companies p...
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Line 9, column 465, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...d government fund to follow their work. In another side, art deeply realtes to the...
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Message: Use only 'less' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: less
...tists income incomparison to athelts is more less, because athelets are in focus of big c...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, first, if, second, so, therefore, for example, i feel, i think, in contrast, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 15.1003584229 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1960.0 1977.66487455 99% => OK
No of words: 407.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.81572481572 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49157444576 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67748340979 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.53316953317 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 603.9 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 44.7635570712 48.9658058833 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.6666666667 100.406767564 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.9583333333 20.6045352989 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.04166666667 5.45110844103 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.135994205478 0.236089414692 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0357262154929 0.076458572812 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0334872985587 0.0737576698707 45% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0794850911411 0.150856017488 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0288407596402 0.0645574589148 45% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 11.7677419355 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.38 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.0 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 86.8835125448 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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