Twin Studies

Essay topics:

Twin Studies

Both the author of the passage and the professor are discussing Twin Studies.
The passage claims that monozygotic twins depict similar characters due to the fact that they share a hundred percent of their genetic patterns. The professor counters this claim by arguing that the fact that identical twins show the same behavior is not due to the gene, rather, it is due to the environment.
The author states that dizygotic twins differ from identical twins by the fact that the dizygotic twins have in common only fifty percent of their genetic makeup. This reinforces the author's argument that monozygotic twins are similar, for they have a higher percentage of genetic patterns in common. However, the professor illustrated that the reason why the first group of twin discussed differs from the second is that the environment where they grew up. The professor gave an example of parents who treat their identical twins as if they were one person. In fact, those parents expect their twin children to participate in similar activities and give them similar clothes and toys. This explains the similarity in the behaviors of identical twins. Their parents, who constitute their living environment, push them to have the same behavior by treating them as one person.

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Average: 6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Both the author of the passage and the p...
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...rofessor are discussing Twin Studies. The passage claims that monozygotic twin...
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...rather, it is due to the environment. The author states that dizygotic twins d...
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Line 3, column 6, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...r, it is due to the environment. The author states that dizygotic twins diff...
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...eir genetic makeup. This reinforces the authors argument that monozygotic twins are sim...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, second, so, in fact

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 10.4613686534 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 5.04856512141 0% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 7.30242825607 41% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 12.0772626932 99% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 22.412803532 120% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 23.0 30.3222958057 76% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 5.01324503311 80% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1060.0 1373.03311258 77% => OK
No of words: 208.0 270.72406181 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.09615384615 5.08290768461 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.79765784423 4.04702891845 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55023493523 2.5805825403 99% => OK
Unique words: 107.0 145.348785872 74% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.514423076923 0.540411800872 95% => OK
syllable_count: 324.0 419.366225166 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 3.25607064018 154% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.23620309051 61% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 13.0662251656 77% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 21.2450331126 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.9975756685 49.2860985944 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.0 110.228320801 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8 21.698381199 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.9 7.06452816374 55% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.09492273731 73% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 5.0 4.19205298013 119% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 4.33554083885 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 4.45695364238 45% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.27373068433 140% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.219351744508 0.272083759551 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.104920462902 0.0996497079465 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0704219896762 0.0662205650399 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.163414600091 0.162205337803 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.030239216405 0.0443174109184 68% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 13.3589403974 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 53.8541721854 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.0289183223 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.3 12.2367328918 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.2 8.42419426049 97% => OK
difficult_words: 47.0 63.6247240618 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.7273730684 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.498013245 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.2008830022 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum four paragraphs wanted. The correct pattern:

para 1: introduction
para 2: doubt 1
para 3: doubt 2
para 4: doubt 3

Less contents wanted from the reading passages(25%), more content wanted from the lecture (75%).

Don't need a conclusion paragraph.

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Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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