In the United States, medical information about patients traditionally has been recorded and stored on paper forms. However, there are efforts to persuade doctors to adopt electronic medical record systems in which information about patients is stored in electronic databases rather than on paper. It is argued that storing patients’ medical records in electronic databases has several advantages over traditional paper-based record keeping.
Reducing Costs
First, the use of electronic records can help reduce costs by saving money on storing and transferring medical records. While paper records require a significant amount of storage space, electronic medical records take up virtually no space. Moreover, by having patients’ records computerized in databases, doctors can easily access the records from almost anywhere and can easily duplicate and transfer them when necessary. This costs much less than copying, faxing, or transporting paper records from one location to another.
Preventing Errors
Second, electronic medical records are crucial to reducing the chances of medical errors. Illegible handwriting, improper transcription of data, and nonstandard organization of paper records have caused errors that in some cases have had serious consequences for the patients’ health. In contrast, electronic records are associated with standardization of forms and legible computer fonts and thus minimize the possibility of human error.
Aiding Research
Third, electronic medical records can greatly aid medical research by making it possible to gather large amounts of data from patient records. It is often impractical, impossible, or prohibitively expensive to manually go through thousands of patients’ paper records housed in doctors’ offices. However, with the existence of electronic medical records, it would be simple to draw out the needed information from the medical databases because the databases are already formatted for data collection. Once in the electronic system, the records could be accessed from any research location.
The article states that storing medical data electrically will be more advantageous than the storing data traditionally by pen and paper, and the author provides three reasons of support. However, the professor in the listening explains that the advantages mentioned by the author is uncertain and repudiates all the reasons.
First, the reading claims that electronic database of medical information will reduce cost by saving money on storing and transferring medical records. Notwithstanding, the professor refutes the point by saying that saving money is unlikely by using electronic medium. She expounds that doctor still need to store data on paper for emergency case and storing data by traditional is important because signature on the papers shows its authenticity. If a doctor stores the data in electronic medium, then he or she needs to pay for it. Therefore, saving money by using electronic database is not likely in some cases.
Second, the author states that storing data on electronic medium will prevent error of the records, which is crucial. On the contrary, the professor opposes this view and states that minimization of errors is not possible by using electronic database. According to the professor, doctors use pen and paper to record their patient cases in their chamber and they are rush during the recording, so their handwriting is often ambiguous. Therefore, at the time of data entry in the electronic database by following those unclear records will cause errors.
Third, the article posits that electronic database aid research by gathering large amount of data of the patients. Nevertheless, the professor challenges this advantage also. The professor describes that researchers are not often permitted to access the database. To use those databases researcher need to follow a complex procedure, including permission from different persons, such as doctors, authority, and patients, for maintaining privacy of the patients. In many cases the permission are not granted, so aiding research is not a obvious point of advantage in electronic database.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 170, Rule ID: ALSO_SENT_END[1]
Message: 'Also' is not used at the end of the sentence. Use 'as well' instead.
Suggestion: as well
...the professor challenges this advantage also. The professor describes that researche...
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Line 7, column 278, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'databases'' or 'database's'?
Suggestion: databases'; database's
...ed to access the database. To use those databases researcher need to follow a complex pro...
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Line 7, column 535, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
... not granted, so aiding research is not a obvious point of advantage in electroni...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, nevertheless, second, so, still, then, therefore, third, such as, in many cases, in some cases, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 10.4613686534 115% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 5.04856512141 119% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 7.30242825607 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 12.0772626932 83% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 22.412803532 98% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 30.3222958057 135% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 5.01324503311 40% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1768.0 1373.03311258 129% => OK
No of words: 325.0 270.72406181 120% => OK
Chars per words: 5.44 5.08290768461 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24591054749 4.04702891845 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91637125582 2.5805825403 113% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 145.348785872 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.52 0.540411800872 96% => OK
syllable_count: 557.1 419.366225166 133% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.55342163355 109% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 3.25607064018 31% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.23620309051 109% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.51434878587 132% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 2.5761589404 194% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 13.0662251656 122% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 21.2450331126 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.6744072892 49.2860985944 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.5 110.228320801 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3125 21.698381199 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.5625 7.06452816374 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 4.19205298013 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 4.33554083885 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.27373068433 140% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.215334374104 0.272083759551 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0676016962665 0.0996497079465 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.065597305617 0.0662205650399 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.129478025428 0.162205337803 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.069254184046 0.0443174109184 156% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 13.3589403974 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 53.8541721854 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.0289183223 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.27 12.2367328918 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.15 8.42419426049 109% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 63.6247240618 146% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.7273730684 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.498013245 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.2008830022 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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