The widespread phenomenon of mass communication through cell phones and the internet has spurred enormous controversy Many believe that people have become less able to build bonds with friends and family members It is impossible to deny that social media | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

Essay topics:

The widespread phenomenon of mass communication through cell phones and the internet has
spurred enormous controversy. Many believe that people have become less able to build bonds
with friends and family members. It is impossible to deny that social media is constantly
changing the way that people interact with one another. With the advent of new technologies that
allow for non-simultaneous and distant interaction, people all over the world are now able to
build relationships in a way that was formerly not possible. Some might say that this is a
negative trend, but this new development opens up for unique and effective connections.
People often feel estranged in their surroundings. There are so many hobbies and interests that
people enjoy, that it can be difficult to find someone who shares the same passions. Social media
is of huge benefit to these people as they are empowered with opportunity for connection to a
widespread community and countless resources. Some may have always wanted to learn more
about a topic without having an avenue to jump in. Social media has proved itself to be effective
in educating people of all ages on a variety of subjects ranging from rollerblading to string
theory.
Moreover, the internet is especially helpful for helping people find a voice. Whereas the first
amendment protects our right to free speech, many people feel that they have lost their ability to
be heard. Social media allows us all to find a new way to speak confidently and ensures that
every person has the opportunity to be heard.

Describe the risks discussed in the lecture and explain how they relate to the purpose of the
reading passage.

The reading and lecture are both about Speaking Through Social Media. While the author of the reading passage states the benefits of using social media, the lecturer highlights the risk associated with using social media.

First of all, according to the reading passage, With the advent of new technologies people are now able to build distant relationship, which once seemed impossible. However, the lecturer thinks that using social media has risks associated with it. According to the lecturer, users on the social media can be subjected to phishing attacks which can cause them to lose their valuable information, and students can be subjected to bullying attacks.

Secondly, the author states that the social media helps people build more connections especially with someone who shares similiar interest, and it is also an effective mode of education. However, the lecturer disputes this point. He thinks that increased use of social media has caused the network to grow smaller. According to him, since people spend most of the time on social media they lack socia skills. therefore, they communicate with only those people that are important to them. He bolster his claims by providing statistics from Duke university as evidence.

Finally, the author claims that the social media has helped people find a voice. Social media provides a platform for people to speak openly and confidently. On the other hand, the lecturer believe that the social media has made people more confined. He thinks that because of the social media people only join those communities that share same interest.

In conclusion, although the reading and the lecture are both about Speaking Through Social Media, the two/three main points made in the reading are effectively challenged by the lecturer.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 410, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Therefore
...on social media they lack socia skills. therefore, they communicate with only those peopl...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 492, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'He' must be used with a third-person verb: 'bolsters'.
Suggestion: bolsters
...e people that are important to them. He bolster his claims by providing statistics from...
^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, however, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, in conclusion, first of all, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 10.4613686534 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 5.04856512141 59% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 7.30242825607 68% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 12.0772626932 91% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 22.412803532 103% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 30.3222958057 119% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 5.01324503311 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1512.0 1373.03311258 110% => OK
No of words: 285.0 270.72406181 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.30526315789 5.08290768461 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10876417139 4.04702891845 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51751390654 2.5805825403 98% => OK
Unique words: 150.0 145.348785872 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.526315789474 0.540411800872 97% => OK
syllable_count: 459.9 419.366225166 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 3.25607064018 123% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.23620309051 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.25165562914 240% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.51434878587 132% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 2.5761589404 272% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 13.0662251656 122% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 21.2450331126 80% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 47.6566086052 49.2860985944 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.5 110.228320801 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.8125 21.698381199 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.3125 7.06452816374 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 4.19205298013 48% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 4.33554083885 185% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 4.45695364238 90% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.27373068433 94% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.208663335786 0.272083759551 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0838966964674 0.0996497079465 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0397767723857 0.0662205650399 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.128964011083 0.162205337803 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0375027103443 0.0443174109184 85% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 13.3589403974 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 53.8541721854 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.0289183223 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.22 12.2367328918 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.36 8.42419426049 99% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 63.6247240618 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.7273730684 103% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.498013245 84% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.2008830022 116% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, however, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, in conclusion, first of all, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments