Many people think regions affect successful persons. What is your opinion about native regions and accomplished person influence on the regions they belong to?

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Many people think regions affect successful persons. What is your opinion about native regions and accomplished person influence on the regions they belong to?

Many people think that the region has profound impact on the success of a person. However, there are some controversies to this thought as some feel it is mere illusion. Region can be one of a factor but not the only factor for a success of a person. This essay will explain how region plays a limited role in the success of a person.
Firstly, Looking in depth at the life history of successful people, most of them came from poor family background. It is their sheer willpower, hard work and continuous effort that has contributed to standout from others. For instance Sam Walton, who built the giant retail empire - WAL-MART, claimed to be "The business man of the century" came from a humble background who lived by selling newspapers. As per statistics, about 80% of the most admired famous individuals attribute their success to hardworking, perseverance and continuous learning.
Additionally there are many such heroes who have devoted their life in becoming prominent. For example, Dr. APJ Abdul Kalam - the missile man of India came from a family that was below poverty but have achieved huge success and is a role model for millions of people. He became a scientist, achieved tremendous success in aerospace and become the president of India. Many internationally accredited famous personalities have had less impact on the region. Sachin Tendulkar, called “The God of cricket" comes from family with no cricket knowledge. He mentioned in an interview that hard work and continuous practice are the key factors for him to raise the bar.
Will all the above facts, I would conclude that success of one is beyond the region. Legends flourish even in the adverse region and surroundings. It is the willpower, hard work and continuous learning that matters the most.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Additionally,
... perseverance and continuous learning. Additionally there are many such heroes who have dev...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, however, if, look, so, for example, for instance

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 10.5418719212 104% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 6.10837438424 65% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 8.36945812808 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 5.94088669951 151% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 20.9802955665 91% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 31.9359605911 119% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 5.75862068966 35% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1500.0 1207.87684729 124% => OK
No of words: 297.0 242.827586207 122% => OK
Chars per words: 5.05050505051 5.00649968141 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15134772569 3.92707691288 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85137407448 2.71678728327 105% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 139.433497537 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.579124579125 0.580463131201 100% => OK
syllable_count: 461.7 379.143842365 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.57093596059 102% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.6157635468 130% => OK
Article: 2.0 1.56157635468 128% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.71428571429 58% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.931034482759 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 3.65517241379 27% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 12.6551724138 134% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.5024630542 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.2429746792 50.4703680194 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.2352941176 104.977214359 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.4705882353 20.9669160288 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.05882352941 7.25397266985 56% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.12807881773 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.33497536946 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 6.9802955665 129% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 2.75862068966 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 2.91625615764 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.214634091332 0.242375264174 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0848577033229 0.0925447433944 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.111379027234 0.071462118173 156% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.149926250775 0.151781067708 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.104878435871 0.0609392437508 172% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 12.6369458128 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 53.1260098522 102% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.54236453202 47% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.9458128079 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.71 11.5310837438 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.0 8.32886699507 108% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 55.0591133005 154% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.94827586207 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.3980295567 85% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.5123152709 86% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 77.7777777778 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 70.0 Out of 90
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