Some people think placing advertisements in schools is a great resource for public schools that need additionally funding, but others think it exploits children by treating them as a captive audience for corporate sponsors.
Choose which position you most agree with and discuss why you chose that position. Support your point of view with details from your own experiences, observations or reading.
Recently, the phenomenon of placing advertisement in public school and its corresponding impact has sparked a heated debate. Although contested by many that the matter of raising funding is highly beneficial, such issue is regarded thoroughly both constructive and positive by substantial number of individuals. I am inclined to believe that beneficial advertisement can be a plus, and I will analyze that throughout this essay.
From social standpoint, advertisement which are placed in school can provide the society with noticeable fact that the merit of collecting a substantial amount of funding as well as solving financial problems, are inextricably bound up. According to my own experience, when I was a university student, I performed an academic research which discovered providing better facilities for students. Thus, beneficial ramifications of both making money and developing student's productivity apparently can be seen.
Within the realm of science,advertisement which contribute to treating as a captivate audience might increase consequences of child abuse. Moreover, fundamental aspects of immoral behavior would relate to this reality that demerits of additional funding pertain to making nonsense of business. As a tangible example, some scientific research undertaken by a prestigious university has asserted that downside of n is correlated negatively with n. Hence, it is correct to presume preconceived notion of m.
To conclude, while there are compelling arguments on both sides I profoundly believe that the merits of advertisement in school in order to raising funding outweigh its demerits. Not only do the advantages of raising awareness would prove the significance of providing children with more facilities, but also pinpoint tackling financial problems implications.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , advertisement
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Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...isement which contribute to treating as a captivate audience might increase consequences of...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, apparently, but, hence, if, moreover, so, thus, well, while, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 10.5418719212 95% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 6.10837438424 115% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 8.36945812808 60% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 5.94088669951 185% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 20.9802955665 86% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 31.9359605911 122% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 5.75862068966 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1540.0 1207.87684729 127% => OK
No of words: 266.0 242.827586207 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.78947368421 5.00649968141 116% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03850299372 3.92707691288 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.42126744761 2.71678728327 126% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 139.433497537 125% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.654135338346 0.580463131201 113% => OK
syllable_count: 486.9 379.143842365 128% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.57093596059 115% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.6157635468 65% => OK
Article: 1.0 1.56157635468 64% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 1.71428571429 233% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.931034482759 215% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 3.65517241379 109% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 12.6551724138 95% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.5024630542 107% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.2877965867 50.4703680194 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.333333333 104.977214359 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.1666666667 20.9669160288 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.41666666667 7.25397266985 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.12807881773 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.33497536946 37% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 6.9802955665 86% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 2.75862068966 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 2.91625615764 69% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.158721722551 0.242375264174 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0498625903046 0.0925447433944 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0460626060286 0.071462118173 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0857053112816 0.151781067708 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0159214902231 0.0609392437508 26% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.9 12.6369458128 134% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 32.22 53.1260098522 61% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.54236453202 171% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 10.9458128079 130% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.3 11.5310837438 141% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.84 8.32886699507 130% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 55.0591133005 187% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 9.94827586207 151% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.3980295567 104% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.5123152709 105% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 72.0 Out of 90
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