Successful sports stars and glamorous film stars are a role model for youngsters. Do you agree or disagree?
Recently, the phenomenon of becoming famous peoples as a role model for youngsters and its corresponding impacts has sparked a heated debate. Although contested by many that the matter of choosing the right public figure is highly rewarding, some opponents argued about its negative aspects. I am profoundly inclined to believe that following the right person as a role model not only could be beneficial, but also could bring many merits for the young generation, and this essay will examine both sides by providing some academic evidence before concluding.
To begin with, from a social standpoint, following successful persons could provide a society with some noticeable effects which are rooted in hardworking and its corresponding results. Furthermore, most of the athletes are participating in some charity programs which could be a good motivation for their young followers. From my own experience when I was a college student and I participated in an academic research in our University, most of the young students are willing to follow the famous actors’ footstep in some useful community services.
On the other hand, some opponents claim their opposition to the demerits of following famous actors. They are using valid logic to support that some of these public figures may involve in drug use or some racial discrimination, and as a consequence, these disorder behaviors affected young followers. According to an academic research conducted by Tehran University, many of famous singers, especially the younger one, did not obey the ethical values of the society which could have some detrimental impacts on their advocators.
To recapitulate, I pen down saying that following the celebrities is like a two-edged sword, and it is on young generation to choose wisely who to follow. Moreover, governments could set some preventing rules to decrease some social damage.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, may, moreover, so, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 10.5418719212 95% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 6.10837438424 131% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 8.36945812808 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 5.94088669951 151% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 20.9802955665 100% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 31.9359605911 119% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 5.75862068966 139% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1602.0 1207.87684729 133% => OK
No of words: 297.0 242.827586207 122% => OK
Chars per words: 5.39393939394 5.00649968141 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15134772569 3.92707691288 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98968664881 2.71678728327 110% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 139.433497537 128% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.599326599327 0.580463131201 103% => OK
syllable_count: 512.1 379.143842365 135% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.57093596059 108% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.6157635468 87% => OK
Article: 1.0 1.56157635468 64% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.71428571429 58% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 0.931034482759 430% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 3.65517241379 164% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 12.6551724138 87% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 20.5024630542 132% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 53.8935283378 50.4703680194 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 145.636363636 104.977214359 139% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.0 20.9669160288 129% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.81818181818 7.25397266985 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.12807881773 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.33497536946 56% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 6.9802955665 86% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 2.75862068966 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 2.91625615764 34% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0483093526299 0.242375264174 20% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0215451658024 0.0925447433944 23% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0346218064274 0.071462118173 48% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.030004069487 0.151781067708 20% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0375774079945 0.0609392437508 62% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.5 12.6369458128 138% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.61 53.1260098522 67% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.54236453202 171% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 10.9458128079 137% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.28 11.5310837438 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.19 8.32886699507 122% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 55.0591133005 178% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.94827586207 141% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.3980295567 123% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.5123152709 143% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.1111111111 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 10.0 Out of 90
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