It is more important for schoolchildren to learn about local history than world history. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
It is believed that the role of local history have valued for young students over against that of world history. While school students could benefit from later one, I tend to think that local history are more essential for them in terms of personality.
Studying world history could be useful and entertaining at the same time. Acquiring knowledge about past events of other nations could equipped students with more well-rounded outlook of life. Learning about the World War 2, for instance, can enhance their understanding about various aspects of the world in recent days. Besides that, it could be beneficial for their future while being taught about other countries’ background can cause lots of advantages for those who desire to work abroad. In another words, knowing their habits and cultures would possess a unique opportunity to work for foreign enterprises like Japanese. However, without learning their own history, young learners could not have a wide view about the whole world.
From another angle, teaching local history for students, especially younger ones, is vital and no one can deny the importance of it. Learning about their own history and pasts, in not only informative but also essential while it is for sure an indispensable part of their personality. Furthermore, it could developed youngsters’ patriotism whereas many of them do now know anything about how their fathers defeat outside intruders and built their desirable land. So as a consequences of knowing all these history, young students can be proud of who they are, their origin and treasure the life they have these days. In my opinion, for all learners, knowing about their history, for example their contemporary history such as revolutions, is not only their privilege but their responsibility about their ancestors.
In overall, although learning about world history is beneficial and sometimes may share equal importance just as local history, I believe the significance of domestic history is beyond comparison. Teaching history, no matter local or not, could be more entertaining if it involved some outside activity like visiting museum.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: The verb 'could' requires the base form of the verb: 'equip'
Suggestion: equip
...bout past events of other nations could equipped students with more well rounded outlook...
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Message: The verb 'could' requires the base form of the verb: 'develop'
Suggestion: develop
...heir personality. Furthermore, it could developed youngsters apos; patriotism whereas man...
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Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a consequence' or simply 'consequences'?
Suggestion: a consequence; consequences
...s and built their desirable land. So as a consequences of knowing all these history, young stu...
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Line 5, column 505, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this history' or 'these histories'?
Suggestion: this history; these histories
...nd. So as a consequences of knowing all these history, young students can be proud of who the...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, furthermore, however, if, look, may, so, well, whereas, while, for example, for instance, such as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 24.0651302605 141% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1813.0 1615.20841683 112% => OK
No of words: 342.0 315.596192385 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.30116959064 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30037696126 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67096100567 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 176.041082164 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.558479532164 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 565.2 506.74238477 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.5489029461 49.4020404114 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.866666667 106.682146367 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.8 20.7667163134 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.8 7.06120827912 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.289861739508 0.244688304435 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.11602463451 0.084324248473 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0645597146845 0.0667982634062 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.209487953509 0.151304729494 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0348655618576 0.056905535591 61% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 13.0946893788 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 50.2224549098 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.76 12.4159519038 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.7 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 78.4519038076 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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