TPO-13 - Integrated Writing Task
Private collectors have been selling and buying fossils, the petrified remains of ancient organisms, ever since the eighteenth century. In recent years, however, the sale of fossils, particularly of dinosaurs and other large vertebrates, has grown into a big business. Rare and important fossils are now being sold to private ownership for millions of dollars. This is an unfortunate development for both scientists and the general public.
The public suffers because fossils that would otherwise be donated to museums where everyone can see them are sold to private collectors who do not allow the public to view their collections. Making it harder for the public to see fossils can lead to a decline in public interest in fossils, which would be a pity.
More importantly, scientists are likely to lose access to some of the most important fossils and thereby miss out on potentially crucial discoveries about extinct life forms. Wealthy fossil buyers with a desire to own the rarest and most important fossils can spend virtually limitless amounts of money to acquire them. Scientists and the museums and universities they work for often cannot compete successfully for fossils against millionaire fossil buyers.
Moreover, commercial fossil collectors often destroy valuable scientific evidence associated with the fossils they unearth. Most commercial fossil collectors are untrained or uninterestedin carrying out the careful field work and documentation that reveal the most about animal life in the past. For example, scientists have learned about the biology of nest-building dinosaurs called oviraptors by carefully observing the exact position of oviraptor fossils in the ground and the presence of other fossils in the immediate surroundings. Commercial fossil collectors typically pay no attention to how fossils lie in the ground or to the smaller fossils that may surround bigger ones.
The both reading and lecture discuss the advantages and disadvantages of selling fossils to private ownership. According to the reading, The author suggests three competing reasons on the negative points of selling fosils, which are all rejected by the lecture. The lecture illustrates the idea that none of these evidences are convincing at all and says that the advantages of selling fossils to private collector outweigh its disadvantages, citing three reasons to reject the points in the reading.
First of all, the reading asserts that by selling fossils to private ownership it would be hard for people to see fossils and consequently causes a decrease in public interest in fossils. The professor, on the contrary, casts doubt on this idea by saying that buying fossils by commercial company would not be lead to declining in public interest. Moreover, there are a lot of available fossils which could be purchased by public libraries or schools. They can buy those fossils and shows them to people.
Secondly, the author claims that scientific may lose access to some of the crucial fossils and miss out some important discoveries. The lecturer, on the contrary, refutes this claim by saying that this opinion is not realistic. Furthermore, he asserts that all fossils should be tested and these tests run by scientist and provide lots of details about fossils. In addition, even if fossils sell to a private company these fossil pass through hands of expert, therefore, the scientists would not miss out any important information.
Finally, the passage averts that most commercial fossil collector are not well-trained and destroy some important evidence such as position of fossils in the ground and the surrounding area of fossils. The lecture, however, disagrees with this view and asserts that most of the commercial fossils collector work on undiscovered sites. Moreover, availability of fossils in more important and outweigh the lost of some information about location of fossil and also undiscovered fossils. Moreover, there are a lot of sites in which university and scientists can carry out research.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 64, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...aims that scientific may lose access to some of the crucial fossils and miss out some impor...
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Line 5, column 418, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this fossil' or 'these fossils'?
Suggestion: this fossil; these fossils
...en if fossils sell to a private company these fossil pass through hands of expert, therefore...
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Line 7, column 290, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'fossils'' or 'fossil's'?
Suggestion: fossils'; fossil's
...and asserts that most of the commercial fossils collector work on undiscovered sites. M...
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Line 7, column 486, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Two successive sentences begin with the same adverb. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...f fossil and also undiscovered fossils. Moreover, there are a lot of sites in which univ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, finally, first, furthermore, however, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, in addition, such as, first of all, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 10.4613686534 96% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 5.04856512141 158% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 7.30242825607 205% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 12.0 12.0772626932 99% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 22.412803532 98% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 30.3222958057 178% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 5.01324503311 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1790.0 1373.03311258 130% => OK
No of words: 339.0 270.72406181 125% => OK
Chars per words: 5.2802359882 5.08290768461 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29091512845 4.04702891845 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80994780816 2.5805825403 109% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 145.348785872 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.495575221239 0.540411800872 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 539.1 419.366225166 129% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.23620309051 121% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 2.5761589404 155% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 13.0662251656 115% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 21.2450331126 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.7221560685 49.2860985944 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.333333333 110.228320801 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6 21.698381199 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.1333333333 7.06452816374 158% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 4.19205298013 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 4.45695364238 135% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.27373068433 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.554635829425 0.272083759551 204% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.200835151387 0.0996497079465 202% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0998693778528 0.0662205650399 151% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.343819193073 0.162205337803 212% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.127580737325 0.0443174109184 288% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 13.3589403974 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 53.8541721854 91% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.0289183223 108% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.64 12.2367328918 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.55 8.42419426049 101% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 63.6247240618 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.7273730684 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.498013245 103% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.2008830022 134% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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