The following is a memorandum from the business manager of a television station.
"Over the past year, our late-night news program has devoted increased time to national news and less time to weather and local news. During this period, most of the complaints received from viewers were concerned with our station's coverage of weather and local news. In addition, local businesses that used to advertise during our late-night news program have canceled their advertising contracts with us. Therefore, in order to attract more viewers to our news programs and to avoid losing any further advertising revenues, we should expand our coverage of weather and local news on all our news programs."
The author's statement and conclusions regarding an attempt to increase the advertising revenues seems inept. There are several assumption, that are not stated and false assumptions stated which may seem lacing depth. Though, the manager's intention is quiet acquainted with good intention, the non-stated assumptions or the false assumptions made is making the argument futile. Thus, the total argument is filled with loop holes that needs to be addressed and is inherently flawed.
Firstly, the author is stating that complaints regarding not telecasting the weather news and the local news by the viewers. The author is not stating that which and what all the news programs are being telecast through out the day or is it that the news channel is made available only during nights. Without this information, the complaints seem pointless. It may be the fact that the local news and the weather news is being shown at some time everyday in the morning or noon hours or so. Hence, the author's statements about worrying about the viewer's complaints seem futile.
Secondly, the author is also not stating that at what time what news is being telecast previously and currently. Without this knowledge, the author is stating that the tact to attract the viewers, is better to telecast the local and weather news to its former level. This is not quiet agreeable. One more point which is missing here is the author is not stating that whether the local news telecast, was a live telecast or the recorder one. If it was the recorded one then the local business advertisements can be telecast at any time in the day. It may not always be true that the viewers will watch the news only at late night. Thus the conclusion made here is also not agreeable.
Thus, the assumptions and the conclusions made by the author is not satisfying to agree upon. Still greater and deeper study has to be made to understand why the complaints are lodged and the state the facts of news telecast timings to approve upon the statements stated.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
flaws:
the arguments are not right on the point. Here goes a sample:
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ? out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 344 350
No. of Characters: 1644 1500
No. of Different Words: 152 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.307 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.779 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.505 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 106 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 83 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 58 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 37 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.111 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.781 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.667 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.341 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.518 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.079 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 5, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
The authors statement and conclusions regarding an ...
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Line 1, column 120, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun assumption seems to be countable; consider using: 'several assumptions'.
Suggestion: several assumptions
...rtising revenues seems inept. There are several assumption, that are not stated and false assumpti...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 128, Rule ID: THERE_RE_MANY[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'assumptions'?
Suggestion: assumptions
...revenues seems inept. There are several assumption, that are not stated and false assumpti...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 230, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'managers'' or 'manager's'?
Suggestion: managers'; manager's
...hich may seem lacing depth. Though, the managers intention is quiet acquainted with good...
^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 213, Rule ID: THROUGH_OUT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'throughout'?
Suggestion: throughout
...ll the news programs are being telecast through out the day or is it that the news channel ...
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Line 3, column 447, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
...eather news is being shown at some time everyday in the morning or noon hours or so. Hen...
^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 442, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...as a live telecast or the recorder one. If it was the recorded one then the local ...
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Line 5, column 631, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...will watch the news only at late night. Thus the conclusion made here is also not ag...
^^^^
Line 7, column 62, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
... and the conclusions made by the author is not satisfying to agree upon. Still greater and deeper...
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Line 7, column 95, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Still,
...author is not satisfying to agree upon. Still greater and deeper study has to be made...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, hence, if, may, regarding, second, secondly, so, still, then, thus, as to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 33.0 19.6327345309 168% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.9520958084 39% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 11.1786427146 143% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 28.8173652695 62% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 55.5748502994 56% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 7.0 16.3942115768 43% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1682.0 2260.96107784 74% => OK
No of words: 344.0 441.139720559 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.88953488372 5.12650576532 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30665032142 4.56307096286 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56470484166 2.78398813304 92% => OK
Unique words: 156.0 204.123752495 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.453488372093 0.468620217663 97% => OK
syllable_count: 497.7 705.55239521 71% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59920159681 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.76447105788 126% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.5036197133 57.8364921388 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.4444444444 119.503703932 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1111111111 23.324526521 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.27777777778 5.70786347227 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 10.0 5.25449101796 190% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.20758483034 24% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 6.88822355289 160% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.237222211003 0.218282227539 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0846853434669 0.0743258471296 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.075717019442 0.0701772020484 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.149207249483 0.128457276422 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.100036369324 0.0628817314937 159% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 14.3799401198 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 48.3550499002 143% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 12.197005988 68% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.08 12.5979740519 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.61 8.32208582834 91% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 98.500998004 67% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.9071856287 67% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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