Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Famous entertainers and athletes deserve to have more privacy than they have now. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Privacy is considered to be one of the main arguable topics among famous people. Many individuals think that famous athletes and entertainers should not have privacy life at all. However, as far as I am concerned, I believe that any public figure should have their privacy kept for their own.
First, diminishing the privacy of many famous athletes and entertainers can lead to diminishing their activities as well. In 2012, Several basketball players from the NY team stopped practicing because some fans hacked their private phones and spread private pictures of the players to the publicity. Many players felt angry and that they are been watched all the time, so they stopped playing games afterward.
Second, if famous figures showed their privacy more often, they might get in negative consequences. When celebrities expose their privacy to their public fans, some fans are dangerous; they can stack celebrities and chase them everywhere. As an example, a famous British actor calls John Snow. He used to show his luxury house to everyone in his public Instagram account. Later, some fans attacked his house and stool some expensive jewelry from Snow. Snow announced that he did a mistake by showing his personal life for everyone; after that, he changed his public account to private ones.
While some disapproval can say that every famous celebrity does not deserve to have a private life because of the price of fame. Yet, these celebrities deserve to have a private life as everyone else. This is one of their basic rights. If celebrities do no deserve privacy, thus any regular person does not deserve as well.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that famous people should have more privacy as anyone around. This is not only because of the limitation their activities afterward, but also to protect famous persons from being in danger.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 43, Rule ID: FAMOUS_CELEBRITY[1]
Message: Use simply 'celebrity'.
Suggestion: celebrity
...ile some disapproval can say that every famous celebrity does not deserve to have a private life...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, second, so, thus, well, while, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 52.1666666667 58% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1556.0 1977.66487455 79% => OK
No of words: 305.0 407.700716846 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.10163934426 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17902490978 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52881485988 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 212.727598566 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.547540983607 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 495.9 618.680645161 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.3568898245 48.9658058833 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.4444444444 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.9444444444 20.6045352989 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.16666666667 5.45110844103 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 11.8709677419 34% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.191776649247 0.236089414692 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0690013834142 0.076458572812 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0587795200241 0.0737576698707 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.117966227343 0.150856017488 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0406359231152 0.0645574589148 63% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 11.7677419355 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 58.1214874552 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.0 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.8 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 86.8835125448 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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