Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?If people have the opportunity to get a secure job, they should take it right away rather than wait for a job that would be more satisfying.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
It has been said before “find a job before you find a wife”. Many people prefer to get hired in a satisfying job whether they need to wait for it or not. However, personally, I feel that people must get a secure job opportunity before they lose it and they should not wait for a satisfying one.
Nowadays, it is much difficult to find a job position than it was used before. The reason behind this difficulty is that the number of graduate students is increasing, and the number of job positions is almost the same or sometimes decreasing. As an example, in 2016, there were almost 130,000 American graduate doctors who graduated from different medical schools around the country. Yet, there were only 40,000 new medical job positions for those graduates. Therefore, at least 110,000 graduates would be unemployed. So, it is better to get a secure job when possible rather than be unemployed for an undetermined period of time.
Besides the difficulties of finding a job, choosing a secure job would help a person from the danger of being unemployed. Sometimes, people would be dragged to dangerous communities if they were unemployed for a long time. For example, if a person did not find a job or waited for the perfect job for an extended amount of time, he/she can be dragged to dangerous social habits such as addiction, alcoholism, or other dangerous stuff. A famous example is Macaroon. Macaroon was a famous English singer who used to sing around the country in the late 1980s. He stopped singing because he thought that he needed to find the perfect song contract, so he denied every contract waiting for the perfect one. After a while of being unemployed, he started losing money and as a result, he drank a lot of alcohol. In the end, he became homeless drug and alcohol addict and died from an overdose of cocaine. Indeed, being unemployed can have a negative impact on a person’s life.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that people should choose a secure job rather than waiting for the right one. I feel it in this way because now, it is hard to find a job, plus being unemployed can lead to dangerous consequences.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, so, therefore, while, at least, for example, i feel, in conclusion, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 52.1666666667 75% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1781.0 1977.66487455 90% => OK
No of words: 370.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.81351351351 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38581623665 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73435652843 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.521621621622 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 551.7 618.680645161 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.8249607658 48.9658058833 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.05 100.406767564 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.05 5.45110844103 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.299734880103 0.236089414692 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.101196734651 0.076458572812 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0867679515243 0.0737576698707 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.207182984547 0.150856017488 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0469295623286 0.0645574589148 73% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 11.7677419355 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.62 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.77 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 86.8835125448 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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