The following appeared in a memo from a vice president of Quiot Manufacturing.
"During the past year, Quiot Manufacturing had 30 percent more on-the-job accidents than at the nearby Panoply Industries plant, where the work shifts are one hour shorter than ours. Experts say that significant contributing factors in many on-the-job accidents are fatigue and sleep deprivation among workers. Therefore, to reduce the number of on-the-job accidents at Quiot and thereby increase productivity, we should shorten each of our three work shifts by one hour so that employees will get adequate amounts of sleep."
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
In the given memo the vice president of Quiot manufacturing explained about reason of on-the-job accidents in industrial plant. According to him the Panoply Industries plant took correct decision to reduce one hour from working because the research suggested that the on-the-job accidents caused due to fatigue and sleep deprivation. There are so many factors which can be a reason for accidents in industries and these reasons are not mentioned and calculated before taking decision of cut working hours.
Moreover, the industries run on technologies and large-scale machines and these machines are control by workers. The workers are careful about their working styles, but machines need timely maintenance. Sometimes we read in newspapers the accidents happened due to ignorance to maintenance of machines and industries blame to workers to save themselves from heavy punishment. The Bhopal Gas Tragedy,1984 happened due to ignorance of owner and poisonous gas leaked from chemical tank and so many people died, but the owner still fights in court and blame to workers. So, the accidents are taking place not only because of fatigue and sleep deprivation but also there are major factors also.
Furthermore, the large-scale industries take care of their staff members who works in lavish offices and ignore the workers who really work hard physically and mentally also. Industries call doctors and their team for regular check-up of the employee of office and provide good services to make them healthy where as the workers get such facilities ones in blue moon. Despite reducing one hour of working the industries should plan for regular medical check-up and offer good facilities to make them physically healthy. The vice president may adjusted one weekly off for the employees and regular medical checkup to reduce the accidents.
Additionally, the researches are based on some facts and consider some variable as constant. In same way the Panoply Industries plant’s research also based on some constant factors present there so we can not assume that the same factors are also applicable in Quiot Industry also. The vice-president should do a polit research and then concluded about accidents occurs in their industry.
Finally, the Quiot Industry can not copy the same idea from any nearby industry to reduce accidents. Quito industry should plan a monitory unit and analyze the reasons of on-the-job accidents and then apply the solutions.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ??? out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 80 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 389 350
No. of Characters: 2032 1500
No. of Different Words: 190 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.441 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.224 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.649 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 154 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 128 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 85 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 55 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.882 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.833 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.647 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.333 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.591 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.185 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 685, Rule ID: ALSO_SENT_END[1]
Message: 'Also' is not used at the end of the sentence. Use 'as well' instead.
Suggestion: as well
...vation but also there are major factors also. Furthermore, the large-scale indust...
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Line 5, column 170, Rule ID: ALSO_SENT_END[1]
Message: 'Also' is not used at the end of the sentence. Use 'as well' instead.
Suggestion: as well
...eally work hard physically and mentally also. Industries call doctors and their team...
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Line 5, column 309, Rule ID: WHERE_AS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'whereas'?
Suggestion: whereas
...vide good services to make them healthy where as the workers get such facilities ones in...
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Line 7, column 282, Rule ID: ALSO_SENT_END[1]
Message: 'Also' is not used at the end of the sentence. Use 'as well' instead.
Suggestion: as well
...s are also applicable in Quiot Industry also. The vice-president should do a polit r...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, furthermore, may, moreover, really, so, still, then
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 19.6327345309 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.9520958084 62% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 11.1786427146 206% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 6.0 13.6137724551 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 14.0 28.8173652695 49% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 55.5748502994 95% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 16.3942115768 43% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2078.0 2260.96107784 92% => OK
No of words: 388.0 441.139720559 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.35567010309 5.12650576532 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43821085614 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74690039716 2.78398813304 99% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 204.123752495 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.494845360825 0.468620217663 106% => OK
syllable_count: 655.2 705.55239521 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 4.96107784431 0% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.4001874275 57.8364921388 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.235294118 119.503703932 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.8235294118 23.324526521 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.17647058824 5.70786347227 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 6.88822355289 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.239081431427 0.218282227539 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0836618216999 0.0743258471296 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0774757940976 0.0701772020484 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.142864632402 0.128457276422 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0756340326846 0.0628817314937 120% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 14.3799401198 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 48.3550499002 84% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 12.197005988 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.1 12.5979740519 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.55 8.32208582834 103% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 98.500998004 95% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3 Out of 6
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