TPO-44 - Independent Writing Task Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing th
Without a shadow of the dount, breeding good kids play a vital role on social development and improvement. Children are the backbone of every society and we must take care of them to have an advanced community. Many people contend that busy parents who do not have a lot of time to spend with their children must have fun with kids in their spare time, while others believe they have use that time doing things related to shoolwork. Both of the opposing arguments appear to be somewhat convincing and stand to point. However, my personal experience and actual observation of life have led me to agree that spending time to play with kids is a better option. In the ensuing lines, I delve into several reasons to substantiate my point.
The first and possibly the paramount consequential reason is that children spend most of their time in schools. So, they learn about different things and what they need more is being with their parents and having enjoyment time. These days, the world alerts swiftly and humankind experiences a huge enhancement and achievement in several fields of science and engineering including transportation, communication and health caring. Furthermore, children are not excluded. So, for learning other concepts of life such as kindness, responsibility and loyalty it is better for them to have fun times with their parents. There is nothing important than happiness and having a good relationship with family especially parents. As a result I really agree that spending time with children to play is useful for children. Having happy kids not only assist to create a good community but also helps to have a better future.
Another point springing to mind is that children who spend time to play games or do sports with their parents are more creative. This concept recently was proved by researchers. Based on scienticts' opinion this subject means being a correlation between creativity and playing game with parents was a complex issue and required a lot of studies with a broad spectrum of samples. A good study would take decades and finding people would take part was hard, but eventally researchers did it. The findings of this noteworthy study conducted on 1000 people with different countries to avoid any bias demonstrated that parents who spend time to play with their children have more creative kids in comparison with others. As you can see, playing with kids has advantages.
To sum it all up, it is easy to see the benefits of spending time with chidren to do sports or play games. These benefits are including, being happy kids and learning concepts of life like kindness and also being creative. I hope someday we do what is better to children. I think by doing the best things to our kid we can build a good country.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 72, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... is that children who spend time to play games or do sports with their parents ar...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, really, so, while, i think, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 13.8261648746 159% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 66.0 52.1666666667 127% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2295.0 1977.66487455 116% => OK
No of words: 470.0 407.700716846 115% => OK
Chars per words: 4.8829787234 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65612321451 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65741955252 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 239.0 212.727598566 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.508510638298 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 695.7 618.680645161 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.7204021639 48.9658058833 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.625 100.406767564 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5833333333 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.83333333333 5.45110844103 70% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 11.8709677419 160% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.148585555583 0.236089414692 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0454861415794 0.076458572812 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0430528363442 0.0737576698707 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0993645454049 0.150856017488 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0284854655738 0.0645574589148 44% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 11.7677419355 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.02 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.04 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 86.8835125448 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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