Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programs (for example working for a charity, improving the neighborhood or teaching sports to younger children). To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Nowadays there would be an unpaid community services such as working for a charity, helping older people etc. are in some countries.These sometimes could be rules, sometimes rituals, but the most parts of them might be related with religions.
First of all, some services are necessary.In community, there are several different types of people who have different ages.And, some of them are older who needed help, some of are younger who live with their family or studying in school, and some parts could be young adults who like be in social environments.Although, all of them have their own abilities, they sometimes need helping from their families, teacher or neighborhoods.
Also, almost all big and developed countries supply all necessities to their needless people.These things such as foods, living places, health equipment, educations so on.But, all of them cost a lot, and they must be paid with money.And, governments separate some parts of their budgets for consuming these efforts.While goverments support their needless people, some volunteers want to join these facilities for their decisions.And, they usually work on educations and helping older people.
In addition, these types of works often about religion in some developing countries such as Turkey,Indonesia,Malaysia.All of them have common approach on their religions which is Islam.Islam religion show people helping is good and positive thing.In these countries, people implement unpaid community services like job, because they think they have to follow rules of their religion.
In conclusion, taking account of all above examples and reasons, I agree that statement.All countries have to give many options to their people who need help, but some parts of these activities should be done volunteers.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, so, while, in addition, in conclusion, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 29.0 43.0788530466 67% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 52.1666666667 71% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1516.0 1977.66487455 77% => OK
No of words: 274.0 407.700716846 67% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.53284671533 4.8611393121 114% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0685311056 4.48103885553 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.27249161078 2.67179642975 122% => OK
Unique words: 154.0 212.727598566 72% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.56204379562 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 452.7 618.680645161 73% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 20.6003584229 29% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 45.0 20.1344086022 223% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 148.32022414 48.9658058833 303% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 252.666666667 100.406767564 252% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 45.6666666667 20.6045352989 222% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 13.6666666667 5.45110844103 251% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 16.0 5.5376344086 289% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.196044759296 0.236089414692 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.126803236097 0.076458572812 166% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0649394612002 0.0737576698707 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.128375935266 0.150856017488 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0559224155351 0.0645574589148 87% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 27.5 11.7677419355 234% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 17.34 58.1214874552 30% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 6.10430107527 213% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 22.0 10.1575268817 217% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 15.68 10.9000537634 144% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.96 8.01818996416 124% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 86.8835125448 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 19.5 10.002688172 195% => OK
gunning_fog: 20.0 10.0537634409 199% => OK
text_standard: 20.0 10.247311828 195% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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