TPO-31: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Because the world is changing so quickly, people now are less happy or less satisfied with their lives than people were in the past. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Nowadays, there are several technological development and many improvements than before, and this casuses a less satisfaction and a boring to human.
First of all, the technology, a high capacity equipments and other tools are being increased day by day. For example, cell phones have the high capacity and their operating systems are more effective than early phones, and they have a internet access. people often use the phones for their communications, but this kind of using causes a seperation between friends, and so humans would be unhappy. Another example is cars, because human use always them for travelling and journey, so it caused as like sense as phones.
In addition, there are several big cities in everywhere, and these have a big buildings, a big shopping malls etc. people who live in these environments are always alone, and they always do shopping themselves, they always are been in their own places. this effects them negatively. this is more boring than early life which is meaned traditional life. In this life , people usually be together, they always speak with each other, and they share problems with a consultant who is the best friend of them. this improves the satisfaction of human.
In my opinion, taking account of all reasons, early life of people much more enjoyable their life than before, new technologies decrease satisfaction and it effects human badly.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...hey always do shopping themselves, they always are been in their own places. this effects ...
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...sultant who is the best friend of them. this improves the satisfaction of human. In...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, so, for example, in addition, kind of, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 9.8082437276 10% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.0286738351 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 43.0788530466 56% => OK
Preposition: 21.0 52.1666666667 40% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1168.0 1977.66487455 59% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 229.0 407.700716846 56% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.10043668122 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.89008302616 4.48103885553 87% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73890958392 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 133.0 212.727598566 63% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.580786026201 0.524837075471 111% => OK
syllable_count: 369.9 618.680645161 60% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.86738351254 375% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.6003584229 58% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.5036671398 48.9658058833 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.3333333333 100.406767564 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0833333333 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.83333333333 5.45110844103 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.5376344086 181% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.146594433669 0.236089414692 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0497472773645 0.076458572812 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0431528629109 0.0737576698707 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0847821358637 0.150856017488 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0169582901277 0.0645574589148 26% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 11.7677419355 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.3 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.58 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 58.0 86.8835125448 67% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
More content wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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