Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children who are taught to co-operate rather than compete become more useful adults.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
The importance between competition and cooperation to the development of children are highly debatable at this present day. Whilst others believe that children should be encouraged to be competitive, some people argue that teaching them about cooperation will mould these kids to a responsible adult. this essay will discuss both sides of the argument in details and will give the author’s perspective regarding this matter.
To begin with, competition plays a pivotal role in a child’s personal development, a reason why some people allow children to compete. Through this, they will develop the sense of passion and hard work as they will do their best to succeed. For instance, in school, children who aim to become top of their class will tend put more effort to study harder. Same in terms of sports, where their goal is to win , so they will practice and train more to become better. In addition, encouraging child to be competitive is teaching his or her essence of sportsmanship. As a result, his or her will learn that competition is not all about winning, it is about being humble and accepting flaws and appreciating the abilities of others.
Notwithstanding, there are people who suggest that teaching youngsters to cooperate than to compete will result to a better adulthood. being cooperative is important as this is a way of building a strong interpersonal relationship with others. To elucidate, a child who knows how to cooperate can easily get along with other children which means that in the future they will be able to handle relationships well either friends, family or colleagues; unlike those who are more competitive who tend to become more isolated. Moreover, training children to be cooperative is also teaching them to lending a hand to others especially to their teammates or classmates. this may redound to a better member of the society in the future as these children will contribute to the improvement of the community.
Henceforth, both sides of the argument is compelling, competition and cooperation are two values that are important and useful in shaping the children to adulthood. A child can be competitive as he or she will work hard and learn the sense of sportsmanship, as well as cooperative by working with others in achieving their common goals. Therefore, these two can exist together.
To recapitulate, despite the argument of cooperation is more useful for children, the benefits of teaching them to be competitive cannot be disregarded. this author believes that if a child learns the value of competition and cooperation, this will result to a better adulthood.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, may, moreover, regarding, so, therefore, well, for instance, in addition, as a result, as well as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 13.1623246493 182% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 7.85571142285 242% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 7.30460921844 192% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 24.0651302605 158% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 66.0 41.998997996 157% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 8.3376753507 240% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2204.0 1615.20841683 136% => OK
No of words: 429.0 315.596192385 136% => OK
Chars per words: 5.13752913753 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55107846309 4.20363070211 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.05859135401 2.80592935109 109% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 176.041082164 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.482517482517 0.561755894193 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 684.0 506.74238477 135% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.1297298992 49.4020404114 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.0 106.682146367 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5789473684 20.7667163134 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.05263157895 7.06120827912 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 8.67935871743 196% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.269534168645 0.244688304435 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0919039176731 0.084324248473 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0542105582535 0.0667982634062 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.171836261176 0.151304729494 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.029024855938 0.056905535591 51% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 13.0946893788 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.83 12.4159519038 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.11 8.58950901804 94% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 78.4519038076 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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