The following appeared in an e-mail sent by the marketing director of the Classical Shakespeare Theatre of Bardville.
"Over the past ten years, there has been a 20 percent decline in the size of the average audience at Classical Shakespeare Theatre productions. In spite of increased advertising, we are attracting fewer and fewer people to our shows, causing our profits to decrease significantly. We must take action to attract new audience members. The best way to do so is by instituting a 'Shakespeare in the Park' program this summer. Two years ago the nearby Avon Repertory Company started a 'Free Plays in the Park' program, and its profits have increased 10 percent since then. If we start a 'Shakespeare in the Park' program, we can predict that our profits will increase, too."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation
In the e-mail, the director points out in order to increase profit of the Classical shakespeare theatre, they will institute a 'shakespeare in the Park' program as avon repertory company did two years ago. The director does so based on that decline in the size of audience by 20 percent over the past ten years and fewer and fewer people attend their shows even though more advertisments were done. The abovementioned are pausible at first glance, but more and more flaws will be found by cautious peruse.
First, despite of the 20 percent of average audience, on one can assure that the program will attract more audience to the theatre's shows. The reason fewer people attanding shows might be the categories of their plays. The genre is out of fashion. Another possibility is that the theatre is hard to access. theatre's location is unconveniet. In order to know whether the program increase the audience, more information of the reason that audience don't refuse to the shows.
Second, the author mentions that the advertising seems useless. fewer and fewer people take part in their shows. As we know the function of advertisement is as the same as a big program. people recoganize much about the theatre after the advertising. it is difficult to consider that people will know much more after the helding of the program. The possible reason of fewer audience might be the advertising. The audience dilikes the theatre after they checke the advertisment. other possibility, like aforementioned, maybe their shows are out of fashion, or the location is hardly accessible. Only is the effect of advertisements provided, we can confirm that the program's feasibility.
Finally, the theatre decided to hold program as avon repertory company did. While we know fewer about the situation of the company and how is the similarity these two coporations, the prediction that imitation of theatre might be failed. Perhaps the location of the avon repertory company is in downtown, it is accessible easily. maybe the avon repertory company is famous company worldwide. Without valid and representative data, we hard to be sure whether it will be success by taking the same strategy as other company.
In conclusion, on reaslizing more and more detail about the theatre, the prediction is feasible and valid. even the reasons above seem cogent and convincing, there are flaws if we read craefully. To successfully deduce the result, much more carefully inspection is necessary.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Sentence: The director does so based on that decline in the size of audience by 20 percent over the past ten years and fewer and fewer people attend their shows even though more advertisments were done.
Error: advertisments Suggestion: advertisements
Sentence: The abovementioned are pausible at first glance, but more and more flaws will be found by cautious peruse.
Error: pausible Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: The reason fewer people attanding shows might be the categories of their plays.
Error: attanding Suggestion: attending
Sentence: Another possibility is that the theatre is hard to access. theatre's location is unconveniet.
Error: theatre Suggestion: theater
Error: unconveniet Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: As we know the function of advertisement is as the same as a big program. people recoganize much about the theatre after the advertising. it is difficult to consider that people will know much more after the helding of the program.
Error: theatre Suggestion: theater
Error: helding Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: recoganize Suggestion: recognize
Sentence: The audience dilikes the theatre after they checke the advertisment. other possibility, like aforementioned, maybe their shows are out of fashion, or the location is hardly accessible.
Error: advertisment Suggestion: advertisement
Error: dilikes Suggestion: dislikes
Error: theatre Suggestion: theater
Error: checke Suggestion: check
Sentence: Finally, the theatre decided to hold program as avon repertory company did.
Error: theatre Suggestion: theater
Error: avon Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: While we know fewer about the situation of the company and how is the similarity these two coporations, the prediction that imitation of theatre might be failed.
Error: theatre Suggestion: theater
Error: coporations Suggestion: corporations
Sentence: Perhaps the location of the avon repertory company is in downtown, it is accessible easily. maybe the avon repertory company is famous company worldwide.
Error: avon Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: In conclusion, on reaslizing more and more detail about the theatre, the prediction is feasible and valid. even the reasons above seem cogent and convincing, there are flaws if we read craefully.
Error: craefully Suggestion: carefully
Error: theatre Suggestion: theater
Error: reaslizing Suggestion: realizing
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 16 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 406 350
No. of Characters: 2015 1500
No. of Different Words: 181 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.489 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.963 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.725 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 143 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 112 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 71 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 47 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.368 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.427 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.368 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.328 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.547 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.114 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 307, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Theatres
... is that the theatre is hard to access. theatres location is unconveniet. In order to kn...
^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 446, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...information of the reason that audience dont refuse to the shows. Second, the autho...
^^^^
Line 3, column 64, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Fewer
...ons that the advertising seems useless. fewer and fewer people take part in their sho...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 187, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: People
...sement is as the same as a big program. people recoganize much about the theatre after...
^^^^^^
Line 3, column 251, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
...bout the theatre after the advertising. it is difficult to consider that people wi...
^^
Line 3, column 478, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Other
...tre after they checke the advertisment. other possibility, like aforementioned, maybe...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 665, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'programs'' or 'program's'?
Suggestion: programs'; program's
...ments provided, we can confirm that the programs feasibility. Finally, the theatre deci...
^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 330, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Maybe
...s in downtown, it is accessible easily. maybe the avon repertory company is famous co...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 107, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Even
..., the prediction is feasible and valid. even the reasons above seem cogent and convi...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, if, may, second, so, while, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.6327345309 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 13.6137724551 59% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 28.8173652695 80% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 55.5748502994 94% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 16.3942115768 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2065.0 2260.96107784 91% => OK
No of words: 405.0 441.139720559 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.0987654321 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48604634366 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82819647847 2.78398813304 102% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 204.123752495 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.461728395062 0.468620217663 99% => OK
syllable_count: 659.7 705.55239521 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.76447105788 126% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.22255489022 213% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 19.7664670659 132% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 22.8473053892 66% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 43.2646322343 57.8364921388 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 79.4230769231 119.503703932 66% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.5769230769 23.324526521 67% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.38461538462 5.70786347227 42% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.25449101796 171% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.67664670659 257% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.148250936681 0.218282227539 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0396230194184 0.0743258471296 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0542842337516 0.0701772020484 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0852374893529 0.128457276422 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0748992356066 0.0628817314937 119% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 14.3799401198 72% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 48.3550499002 116% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.197005988 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.0 12.5979740519 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.24 8.32208582834 99% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 98.500998004 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 11.1389221557 72% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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