Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The extended family (grandparents, cousins, aunts, and uncles) is less important now than it was in the past.
Since the down of humanity and in this sophisticated world meaning of family has been changed, in spite of its indispensibilty, like any other entities. Personally, I belive that extented family is less important nowadays than it was before. I feel this way for three main reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, globalization and accelerated flow of migration has changed the notion of family for people. In the past, there was a few tendency to migrate from your mother land and travelling and migration did not account as an important phenomenon. Currently, the cities and land borders are faiding therefore rate of migration and flow of travelling has been increasingly accelerated. So people are experiencing new concept of family, and families should be concised to fit in this context of travelling and migration. New recent trends of migrated people from middle east to Europe support such idea that they are no longer have relationship with their cousins ants and uncles.
Seconly, jobs and professions was accounted as a part of genetic, from antecents to next generation. So family had a different but also important role in ones economy. The previous generation used to treat the next generation in a special occupation. So social relations revovled around not only same blood but also same social function; this implies why families had greater interactions. In current modern world role of family has been change instead the state and governmant and other social foundations play the role of job training and economic control. My grandparents for example had been working as farmers in a same farm land for at least a century and there were no otherwise destination supposed for my previous generations. So familial interactions is alterd starkly.
In conclusion, I am of the opinion that the extended family is less important is our contemporary world than before. This is because the high rate of migration and its consequences on familial interactions and because of changes in economic and accupation training role of family.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible agreement error. The noun tendency seems to be countable; consider using: 'few tendencies'.
Suggestion: few tendencies
...ly for people. In the past, there was a few tendency to migrate from your mother land and tr...
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Line 9, column 155, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
... a different but also important role in ones economy. The previous generation used t...
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Line 9, column 674, Rule ID: NOW[2]
Message: Did you mean 'now' (=at this moment) instead of 'no' (negation)?
Suggestion: now
...d for at least a century and there were no otherwise destination supposed for my p...
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Line 13, column 282, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...and accupation training role of family.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, so, therefore, at least, for example, i feel, in conclusion, first of all, in spite of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 43.0788530466 49% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1750.0 1977.66487455 88% => OK
No of words: 338.0 407.700716846 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.1775147929 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28774723029 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96666941392 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.565088757396 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 554.4 618.680645161 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.8254962438 48.9658058833 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.941176471 100.406767564 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8823529412 20.6045352989 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.35294117647 5.45110844103 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.151829093077 0.236089414692 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0546446435415 0.076458572812 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0631845982318 0.0737576698707 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.103521956767 0.150856017488 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0384708961012 0.0645574589148 60% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.76 10.9000537634 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.92 8.01818996416 111% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 86.8835125448 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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