Men and women, because of their inherent physical differences, are not equally suited for many tasks.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
In this statement, the speaker asserts that tasks should be different for men and women due to their intrinsic physical disparities. however, in my opinion, physical differences do not show anything about a person’s ability in handling tasks.
some people might argue that, generally, men are stronger than women, thus for some works that require mostly strength, men might be more suitable for women. however, especially in recent society, it is noticeable that many women also start to working in construction cite, being bus drivers and so on. women are no more as weak as the society traditionally think they are and basically men and women are the same in terms of strength, some women might be even stronger than a man. thus, in my point of view, the special physical traits are merely a way to distinguish sex instead of a criteria to judge ones’ competence.
Back in the time, some held the doctrinally idea that women’s only responsibility should only be confined to taking care of their family and they should not have their own career. however, women in a myriad of fields have shown the society that they not only have the same physical capacity as the male but their are also outstanding in their intelligence. Youyou Tu, a well-known female scientist, has dedicated her life to the discovery of treatment to malaria. Her ability to perfectly work with her investigation team and her meticulousness eventually lead her to a success and she was a laureate of the noble prize in the field of physiology. Madam Curie, one of the outstanding scientists in history, spent almost 10 years refining radium. Her perseverance can hardly achieve by any others and this remarkable achievement also brought her a noble prize. Taylor Swift, one of the most talented singers, has written and published songs that are so popular all around the world. she is so unique in her style of music and her has demonstrated such an extraordinary creativity in her works. No matter in the fields of science, politics, art and so on, there is no deny that countless males have shown their great ability at addressing issues and that they have made a significant amount of contributions, but a rising number of female are also proving the fact that being a woman is not a disadvantage and that they are nothing less than men.
In sum, the speaker’s statement is unjustifiable. women also have the right and the freedom to work in the area that traditionally think that is more suitable for men. this is a time where women are demonstrating to the world that they are strong and they can be independent. most importantly, men and women should be treated equally in every field.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: However
...o their intrinsic physical disparities. however, in my opinion, physical differences do...
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Suggestion: Some
...ility in handling tasks. some people might argue that, generally, men...
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Suggestion: However
..., men might be more suitable for women. however, especially in recent society, it is no...
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Suggestion: than
...us drivers and so on. women are no more as weak as the society traditionally think...
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Suggestion: Thus
...omen might be even stronger than a man. thus, in my point of view, the special physi...
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Suggestion: a criterion; criteria
...ely a way to distinguish sex instead of a criteria to judge ones' competence. ...
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Suggestion: However
... they should not have their own career. however, women in a myriad of fields have shown...
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... same physical capacity as the male but their are also outstanding in their intellige...
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...at are so popular all around the world. she is so unique in her style of music and ...
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Suggestion: Women
...aker's statement is unjustifiable. women also have the right and the freedom to ...
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Suggestion: This
...ly think that is more suitable for men. this is a time where women are demonstrating...
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Suggestion: Most
...are strong and they can be independent. most importantly, men and women should be tr...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, so, thus, well, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 19.5258426966 138% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 14.8657303371 121% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.3162921348 133% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 33.0505617978 136% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 58.6224719101 85% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 12.9106741573 70% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2268.0 2235.4752809 101% => OK
No of words: 457.0 442.535393258 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.96280087527 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62358717085 4.55969084622 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87431415906 2.79657885939 103% => OK
Unique words: 235.0 215.323595506 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.514223194748 0.4932671777 104% => OK
syllable_count: 705.6 704.065955056 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 23.0359550562 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.9594115908 60.3974514979 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.368421053 118.986275619 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0526315789 23.4991977007 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.78947368421 5.21951772744 53% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 7.80617977528 154% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 10.2758426966 156% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 5.13820224719 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.150653684561 0.243740707755 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0506245836028 0.0831039109588 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0469055320654 0.0758088955206 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.112600308964 0.150359130593 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.029097225537 0.0667264976115 44% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 14.1392134831 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 48.8420337079 114% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 12.1639044944 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.14 8.38706741573 97% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 100.480337079 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.2143820225 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.